Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答中表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言表达不够自然，有语法错误和重复，且句子较长，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意语法准确性。

Ejemplo: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax after a busy day and reduces my stress. Also, singing allows me to communicate more clearly with my son.

Sugerencia: 回答中信息表达不清晰，语法错误较多，且句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，准确表达学习唱歌的经历。

Ejemplo: Yes, I took an online singing course last year offered by a music academy in Jiangsu province, China.

Sugerencia: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和词汇。

Ejemplo: I want to sing for my grandparents because they cared for me a lot when I was a child. I also want to sing for my mom because she has supported me greatly.

Sugerencia: 回答语法错误严重，表达不清晰，逻辑混乱。建议用简单句表达观点，清楚说明唱歌如何带来快乐。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it expresses the singer's emotions, which can make listeners feel joyful.

× Saying also help me help my son more clearly and beautifully.

✓ Singing also helps me help my son more clearly and beautifully.

这里应该使用动名词'singing'作为主语，而不是'saying'。另外，主语是单数，谓语动词要用第三人称单数形式'helps'。

× Yes, just in last year I learned some courses in an online course designed by a compensatory of music in China, in Jiangsu province.

✓ Yes, just last year I took some courses in an online program designed by a conservatory of music in China, in Jiangsu province.

'learned some courses'表达不准确，应该用'took some courses'表示参加课程。'just in last year'应改为'just last year'。'compensatory'应为'conservatory'。

× I want to sing for my grandparents because when I was a child they they were both caring about me and gave me a lot of help.

✓ I want to sing for my grandparents because when I was a child they were both caring about me and gave me a lot of help.

句中重复了'they'，应删除多余的一个。

× Another person is my mom because she was lifted me a lot.

✓ Another person is my mom because she has helped me a lot.

'was lifted me'语法错误，应使用现在完成时'have helped'表示过去到现在的帮助。

× I think because no one sounds is represent many singers own own emotions and feelings so when we singing a song it can bring happiness to to the listening people.

✓ I think because no one sound can represent many singers' own emotions and feelings, so when we sing a song it can bring happiness to the listening people.

'sounds is represent'语法错误，应为'sound can represent'。'own own'重复，应去掉一个。'when we singing'应为'when we sing'。'to to'重复，应去掉一个。