Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is heartfelt and provides personal background, which is good. However, try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'singing' multiple times, you can use pronouns or synonyms. Try to limit your answer to about 4-5 sentences for better clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I believe I was born to be a singer. When I was a child, I often performed on school stages, and later in college, my teachers, family, and friends encouraged me to pursue singing professionally.

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Avoid phrases like 'God gift' and instead say 'a natural talent'. Also, try to combine your ideas into fewer sentences to sound more fluent and coherent.

Ejemplo: I have never taken formal singing lessons because I consider it a natural talent. However, I would love to attend singing classes in the future if I get the opportunity, as I want to become a professional singer.

Sugerencia: Your answer is emotional and personal, which is good. However, try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'so yeah'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: I want to sing my first song for my mother because she means the world to me. Additionally, I hope to dedicate a song to my late father, which would make my dream come true.

Sugerencia: Your answer shows personal experience, but it is a bit unclear and contains some awkward phrasing. Avoid unnecessary details like 'in the Washington in the washroom' which may confuse the listener. Use linking words to organize your ideas and express your opinion more clearly and naturally.

Ejemplo: I believe singing can bring happiness because, personally, whenever I feel sad or stressed, I start singing. It helps me feel peaceful and calm, no matter where I am.

× I really love singing because I think I am born to be a singer in future.

✓ I really love singing because I think I will be born to be a singer in the future.

The phrase 'I am born to be a singer in future' incorrectly uses the present tense 'am born' to express a future event. The correct form is 'will be born' to indicate future tense, and 'in the future' is the proper expression.

× When I was a kid I used to sing on school stages and in college also my teachers and family and friends always appreciated me to do singing as a profession.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to sing on school stages and in college. Also, my teachers, family, and friends always appreciated me for singing as a profession.

The sentence has a run-on structure and incorrect preposition usage. 'Appreciated me to do singing' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'appreciated me for singing.' Also, commas are needed to separate clauses and items in a list.

× I have never learned singing, I think it's just a God gift that I know how to sing properly.

✓ I have never learned singing; I think it's just a God-given gift that I know how to sing properly.

The phrase 'God gift' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'God-given gift.' Also, the sentence should be separated properly with a semicolon or period instead of a comma splice.

× But I really love to get singing classes in future if I get a chance.

✓ But I would really love to take singing classes in the future if I get a chance.

The phrase 'love to get singing classes' is awkward; 'love to take singing classes' is more natural. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future.' The modal verb 'would' expresses desire politely.

× I want to become a singer and pursue singing as my profession.

✓ I want to become a singer and pursue singing as my profession.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no correction needed.

× It's my dream to sing the first song of my life for my mother.

✓ It's my dream to sing the first song of my life to my mother.

The preposition 'for' is less appropriate here; 'to my mother' correctly indicates the recipient of the song.

× I really love my mother the most.

✓ I love my mother the most.

The adverb 'really' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for clarity and conciseness.

× And, uh, I want to make my dream come true, to sing a song dedicated to my mother and my father who passed away.

✓ I want to make my dream come true by singing a song dedicated to my mother and my father, who passed away.

The sentence is a run-on and awkwardly structured. Using 'by singing' clarifies the action, and commas properly set off the relative clause.

× I don't know much more about people, but I just know about me that whenever I am sad or wherever I am, even in the Washington in the washroom or I get few moments of peace on my work, I start singing at that time because it brings me happiness, peace and calm.

✓ I don't know much about other people, but I know myself well. Whenever I am sad or wherever I am, even in Washington or in the washroom, or when I get a few moments of peace at work, I start singing because it brings me happiness, peace, and calm.

The original sentence has multiple preposition errors and awkward phrasing. 'Much more about people' should be 'much about other people.' 'In the Washington' is incorrect; 'in Washington' is correct. 'On my work' should be 'at work.' Also, the sentence is long and should be broken up for clarity.