Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and relevant, but there is a grammatical error in tense and a slight redundancy. Instead of 'it relaxed my mind', use 'it relaxes my mind' to maintain present tense. Also, avoid repeating the idea of stress relief twice. Try to make your answer more concise and natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love singing because it relaxes my mind and helps me relieve stress.

Sugerencia: Your answer provides good details but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. For example, 'I was the part of music play system' is unclear; you can say 'I was part of the school's music program'. Also, avoid repeating words like 'participated participated'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to be more concise and correct grammar.

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned to sing during my school days. I was part of my school's music program at Baba Karmak Singh Kuttam Singh Senior Secondary School, which is well known in my area. I often participated in various music competitions organised by the school.

Sugerencia: Your answer is heartfelt but contains some repetition and grammatical errors. For example, 'stand by by my side' should be 'stand by my side'. Also, 'show them about my feelings' can be improved to 'express my feelings'. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: I want to sing for my family and friends because they are my biggest supporters. By singing for them, I can express my feelings and emotions, which helps me feel more relaxed and confident around them.

Sugerencia: Your answer is well-structured and relevant with good examples. However, avoid capitalising 'Buster' unnecessarily and try to use more varied vocabulary instead of repeating 'people' multiple times. Also, you can use linking words like 'in addition' instead of 'moreover' for a more natural flow.

Ejemplo: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to individuals. For instance, many enjoy singing while driving or showering as it helps them unwind and calm their minds. In addition, singing acts as a great stress buster that improves mood and makes one feel more relaxed and joyful.

× Yes, I love singing because it relaxed my mind and it works as a stressbuster activity for me.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it relaxes my mind and it works as a stressbuster activity for me.

The verb 'relaxed' is in the past tense, but the sentence is describing a general truth or habitual action, so the present tense 'relaxes' should be used to match the present tense context.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing in my school days.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing in my school days.

The phrase 'in my school days' refers to a specific past time, so the simple past tense 'learned' is more appropriate than the present perfect 'have learned' which is used for unspecified past time or recent actions.

× When I was young, I was the part of music play system in my school.

✓ When I was young, I was part of the music play system in my school.

The article 'the' before 'part' is unnecessary and 'music play system' is awkward; adding 'the' before 'music play system' and removing 'the' before 'part' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× My school name is Baba Karmak Singh Kuttam Singh Senior Secondary School and it is well known and well reputed school in my locality.

✓ My school's name is Baba Karmak Singh Kuttam Singh Senior Secondary School and it is a well-known and well-reputed school in my locality.

Possessive form 'school's name' is correct instead of 'school name'. Also, 'a' is needed before 'well-known and well-reputed school' as it is a singular countable noun. Hyphens are needed in compound adjectives 'well-known' and 'well-reputed'.

× My school held a lot of music competitions where I always participated participated it in.

✓ My school held a lot of music competitions where I always participated.

The verb 'participated' is repeated unnecessarily and the phrase 'participated it in' is incorrect. 'Participated' is an intransitive verb and does not take an object, so 'participated' alone is correct.

× Well, I want to sing for my family and friends because they are my biggest supporters and always stand by by my side.

✓ Well, I want to sing for my family and friends because they are my biggest supporters and always stand by my side.

The phrase 'by by' is a repetition error; only one 'by' is needed before 'my side'.

× If I sing for them, I can show them about my feelings and emotions towards them and it and I will feel more relaxed and more comfortable confident in front of them.

✓ If I sing for them, I can show them my feelings and emotions towards them, and I will feel more relaxed and more confident in front of them.

The phrase 'show them about my feelings' is incorrect; 'show them my feelings' is correct. The repeated 'and it and' is redundant and should be removed. Also, 'comfortable confident' is incorrect; 'more confident' fits better in this context.