Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why singing is beneficial to you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is my hobby. It helps me relax and also improves my vocal skills, which I find very rewarding.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with details. Use correct tense and linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned how to sing during my school days because music was one of our subjects. In that class, I was taught various singing techniques.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some confusion and grammatical mistakes. Be clear about who you want to sing for and why. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: I want to sing for my grandfather because he loves singing and has always encouraged me to become a singer. Therefore, I seize every opportunity to perform for him.

Sugerencia: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas more naturally and use linking words to connect your points. Also, be specific about how singing brings happiness.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others through different types of songs.

× Yes, I like singing because the singing is my hobby, so it helps me to relax my mind and also, uh, improve my skills.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing is my hobby, so it helps me to relax my mind and also, uh, improve my skills.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'singing' when referring to the activity in general. In English, when talking about activities or hobbies in general, the article is usually omitted. Hence, 'singing' without 'the' is correct here.

× During my school time, as the music is our as music was are the subject. So in the music subject I learned about how to sing.

✓ During my school time, music was our subject. So in the music subject, I learned how to sing.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and redundancy. 'Music is' should be in past tense 'music was' to match 'During my school time'. Also, 'as music was are the subject' is incorrect and confusing. The corrected sentence uses past tense consistently and removes unnecessary words for clarity.

× Actually, I want to sing for my father's father because he is also passionate about the singing and they always wanted to see me as a singer.

✓ Actually, I want to sing for my grandfather because he is also passionate about singing and he always wanted to see me as a singer.

'My father's father' is better expressed as 'my grandfather' for clarity. Also, the pronoun 'they' is incorrectly used for a singular person; it should be 'he' to agree with 'my grandfather'. Additionally, 'the singing' should be 'singing' without 'the' as it refers to the activity in general.

× So whenever I got a opportunity, I must grab it and think for my father.

✓ So whenever I get an opportunity, I must grab it and think of my father.

The article 'a' before 'opportunity' is incorrect because 'opportunity' starts with a vowel sound; it should be 'an opportunity'. Also, 'got' is past tense but the sentence implies a general statement, so 'get' (present tense) is appropriate. The preposition 'for' after 'think' is incorrect; it should be 'think of'.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to the people because by singing individuals can express their feelings to toward something as well as they can also show their expressions and their understanding by saying the different kind of songs.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because by singing, individuals can express their feelings toward something as well as show their expressions and understanding by singing different kinds of songs.

The phrase 'to toward' is incorrect; only 'toward' is needed. 'The people' is better as 'people' when speaking generally. 'By saying the different kind of songs' is awkward; 'by singing different kinds of songs' is more natural. Also, 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to agree with 'songs'.