Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答时语言较为口语化且有重复，表达不够简洁。建议减少重复表达，使用更自然流畅的句子，并且注意语法准确性。

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and boosts my confidence. When I sing, I imagine myself performing on stage, which makes me feel happy and empowered.

Sugerencia: 回答中有较多口头语和犹豫词，影响流畅度。建议减少使用“uh”、“umm”等填充词，表达更简洁清晰。

Ejemplo: No, I haven't had professional singing lessons because they are expensive. Instead, I taught myself by watching YouTube tutorials online.

Sugerencia: 回答缺乏条理，表达不够清晰，且有多处犹豫和重复。建议提前组织语言，使用连贯的句子表达观点。

Ejemplo: I would like to sing for my boyfriend because he is my best friend, and I feel comfortable showing my silly side when I sing for him.

Sugerencia: 回答内容较好，但表达稍显笨拙，部分句子结构不够自然。建议使用更准确的词汇和句型，使表达更流畅。

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. Singing releases hormones that make people feel happier and more relaxed. For example, singing birthday songs adds joy to celebrations.

× Yes, personally I really enjoy singing because singing is really relaxing to some extent and you can feel yourself a better person when you are singing.

✓ Yes, personally I really enjoy singing because singing is really relaxing to some extent and you can feel yourself as a better person when you are singing.

这里缺少介词'as'，短语'feel yourself a better person'应为'feel yourself as a better person'，表示感觉自己是一个更好的人。

× Like you can pretend you are a superstar and you are standing in a stage in front of your audience.

✓ Like you can pretend you are a superstar and you are standing on a stage in front of your audience.

介词使用错误，'in a stage'应改为'on a stage'，因为站在舞台上用'on'。

× No, actually I uh, didn't receive a professional training in singing because, umm, that is kind of, umm, money consuming.

✓ No, actually I uh, didn't receive professional training in singing because, umm, that is kind of, umm, money consuming.

'a professional training'中'training'是不可数名词，不需要冠词'a'。

× So my parents didn't send me to a singing class, but I learned how to sing through watching some YouTube video online.

✓ So my parents didn't send me to a singing class, but I learned how to sing through watching some YouTube videos online.

'some YouTube video'中'video'应为复数形式'videos'，因为'some'通常修饰复数名词。

× If I have to choose a person, I will choose my boyfriend because my boyfriend is my best friend and I can, I don't mind if I umm, I display a silly side of myself.

✓ If I have to choose a person, I will choose my boyfriend because my boyfriend is my best friend and I don't mind if I umm, display a silly side of myself.

句中多余的'I can'导致句子结构混乱，应去掉以保持句子通顺。

× So umm, it's quite like, I don't know how to put it, but I just umm, I can do whatever.

✓ So umm, it's quite like, I don't know how to put it, but I just umm, can do whatever.

同上，去掉多余的'I'使句子更自然流畅。

× Yes, definitely. I think singing can stimulate some hormone in your brain and you will feel more relaxing and happier if you open your mouth to sing a song.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think singing can stimulate some hormones in your brain and you will feel more relaxed and happier if you open your mouth to sing a song.

'some hormone'应为复数'hormones'，因为'hormone'可数且此处指多种激素；'feel more relaxing'应为'feel more relaxed'，因为'feel'后接形容词表示感受，'relaxed'是形容词，'relaxing'是现在分词，表示使人放松的。

× And I like when people are celebrating their birthday, you can sing a birthday song to them and this will add up some happy.

✓ And I like when people are celebrating their birthday, you can sing a birthday song to them and this will add some happiness.

'add up some happy'中'happy'是形容词，需用名词'happiness'；'add up'用法不当，应改为'add'。