Chocolate— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat natural but lacks coherence and completeness. Avoid starting with the examiner's question and try to form complete sentences. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete thoughts. Try to give a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it serves as my comfort food. For instance, having a bite of Cadbury chocolate helps me relax after a hard day at work.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to avoid filler words like 'uhm' and ensure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: I don't eat chocolate very often because consuming too much sugar is unhealthy. However, I usually have it about twice a week, and I only eat small pieces rather than a whole bar.

Sugerencia: Your answer is good but could be more fluent and connected. Avoid short, fragmented sentences and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to be more specific about your experiences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a child because most children in my area enjoyed it. However, I developed cavities due to this habit, which led me to stop eating chocolate after some painful dental appointments.

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks fluency and contains incomplete sentences and filler words. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be more specific about why chocolate is popular globally.

Ejemplo: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a delicious sweet treat. Many people enjoy cocoa in their drinks, and chocolate is a key ingredient in numerous desserts, which adds to its global appeal.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and informal. Try to avoid short, incomplete sentences and colloquial expressions like 'You know what I mean?'. Instead, provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words.

Ejemplo: My favourite flavours of chocolate are milk, white, and dark chocolate. I enjoy all kinds because chocolate always brings joy and reminds me of my childhood.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains many short, incomplete sentences and informal phrases. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer more coherent and formal.

Ejemplo: Yes, chocolates are commonly used as gifts during special occasions because they symbolize sweet moments. Gifting chocolates shows the recipient that they are special to you.

× Yes, I enjoy eating chocolates a lot, mostly because it's my comfort food I think.

✓ Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate a lot, mostly because it's my comfort food I think.

The word 'chocolates' is plural, but here it refers to chocolate in general as a substance or food, which is uncountable and should be singular 'chocolate'.

× Maybe Cadburys could bring me comfort after a hard day.

✓ Maybe Cadbury's could bring me comfort after a hard day.

The brand name 'Cadbury's' requires an apostrophe to show possession; also, no preposition error here but spelling and punctuation correction is needed.

× Not very often, I would say, because of course it's not good for your health to eat that much sugar everyday.

✓ Not very often, I would say, because of course it's not good for your health to eat that much sugar every day.

The word 'everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal; the correct phrase here is 'every day' meaning each day, which is two words.

× But uhm. Maybe about twice a week and just a buy it.

✓ But uhm, maybe about twice a week and I just buy it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'I' and removing 'a' before 'buy' corrects the sentence structure and makes it grammatically correct.

× That's what most children do down there.

✓ That's what most children do there.

The phrase 'down there' is unnecessary and informal here; 'there' suffices to indicate the place. Also, 'down there' can imply a specific location which may not be intended.

× And that is also why I did get a lot of cavities in my teeth and that's why I stopped having chocolate after the painful.

✓ And that is also why I got a lot of cavities in my teeth and that's why I stopped having chocolate after the painful.

The auxiliary 'did' is unnecessary with the past tense verb 'get'. Using 'got' alone is correct for past tense statements.

× Dental appointments that I had.

✓ Dental appointments that I had.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb or connection to the previous sentence. It should be combined with the previous sentence for clarity: '...after the painful dental appointments that I had.'

× It's popular around the world because. It does work as a sweet treat and a lot of people enjoy. Having Coco. In their drinks and.

✓ It's popular around the world because it works as a sweet treat and a lot of people enjoy having cocoa in their drinks.

The word 'Coco' should be 'cocoa' (the correct noun). Also, the sentence fragments should be combined properly. The preposition 'in' is correct here but should be connected smoothly in the sentence.

× I enjoy all kinds of chocolates.

✓ I enjoy all kinds of chocolate.

When referring to types or kinds of an uncountable noun like 'chocolate', the noun remains singular. 'Chocolates' implies individual pieces, but here it refers to varieties.

× You should. It keeps the inner child and you alive.

✓ You should. It keeps the inner child in you alive.

The phrase 'the inner child and you alive' is unclear. Adding 'in' clarifies that the inner child inside you is kept alive.

× Chocolates are definitely. Used in. Gifting during special occasions because I feel like there's such a huge part of sweet moments and gifting them really shows that.

✓ Chocolates are definitely used as gifts during special occasions because I feel like they are a huge part of sweet moments and gifting them really shows that.

The phrase 'used in gifting' is awkward; 'used as gifts' is more appropriate. Also, sentence fragments should be combined for clarity.