Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 응답이 직설적이어서 좋지만, 말더듬(uh)과 중복 표현이 많아 유창성이 낮습니다. 문장은 주제문과 지원 세부사항 구조를 갖추었지만 예시나 이유가 구체적이지 않습니다. 길이는 허용 범위 내이나 문장 연결사가 부족합니다. 개선 방법: 불필요한 움라우트(uh) 제거, 하나의 주제문 뒤에 이유와 간단한 예시를 연결어(For example, because)로 이어 말하세요. 발음과 유창성 연습을 위해 문장을 미리 만들고 소리 내어 반복하세요.

Ejemplo: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I find it difficult to learn languages and remember historical dates, because I tend to forget facts unless I review them regularly. However, I do better in subjects like math and science, where understanding concepts helps me more than rote memory.

Sugerencia: 답변이 사건을 말하려는 의도는 분명하지만 문법 오류(tense, 어순)와 어색한 표현('case of yesterday')가 점수를 떨어뜨립니다. 또한 반복(‘I forgot’ / ‘I uh, I didn't get’)이 있고 연결어가 없어 흐름이 부자연스럽습니다. 개선 방법: 사건의 시간과 결과를 명확한 시제(past simple)로 정리하고, 한두 문장으로 이유와 결과를 연결해서 말하세요. 예: 'Yesterday I forgot my smartphone, so I had to go back'처럼 간결하게 구성하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. Yesterday I forgot my smartphone at home when I went to the cinema, so I realised only after arriving and had to go back to get it. It was inconvenient because I couldn't buy tickets online or contact my friends.

Sugerencia: 아이디어는 명확하지만 문법(articles, word order)과 어휘 선택('regulatory')에서 오류가 있어 의미 전달이 혼란스럽습니다. 문장은 장황하고 연결어가 부족합니다. 개선 방법: 주제문을 명확히 하고 supporting details를 하나 또는 두 개로 압축하세요. 적절한 어휘(appointments, plans, reminders)를 사용하고 연결어(so, therefore, for example)를 활용하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요.

Ejemplo: I need to remember my daily schedule and appointments, so I write all my plans in my smartphone calendar. For example, I set reminders for classes and meetings and check them every morning to avoid missing anything.

Sugerencia: 방법은 제시했지만 비격식적 표현('oh', 'I will memorize ice cream')과 반복, 어색한 예시가 자연스러움을 해칩니다. 연결어는 사용했지만 구체성과 정확성이 부족합니다. 개선 방법: 방법을 먼저 제시한 뒤, 구체적 예시와 이유를 연결어(with, for example 등)로 설명하세요. 키워드 사용법을 더 명확히 설명하면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: I usually use the notes app on my smartphone and set short keywords or reminders, so I can check them quickly. For example, I might write 'buy ice cream' as a keyword and set an alert, which helps me remember errands.

× I'm not good at memorizing things, so I don't like uh, memorizing uh, lecture.

✓ I'm not good at memorizing things, so I don't like memorizing lectures.

'Lecture' refers to a single class and needs an article (a) or to be plural (lectures). The student means the activity in general, so plural 'lectures' is appropriate. Suggestion: use plural for general activities or add an article for a specific singular noun.

× Like, uh, languages and history.

✓ Like languages and history.

This is minor: removing the filler 'uh' makes the sentence natural. 'Languages' (plural) and 'history' (uncountable) are correct. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers.

× I forgot lots of the things at the case of yesterday.

✓ I forgot a lot of things yesterday.

The phrase 'lots of the things' is awkward and 'at the case of yesterday' is ungrammatical. Use 'a lot of things' for many items and place the time expression 'yesterday' at the end. Suggestion: simplify to 'I forgot a lot of things yesterday.'

× I forgot my smartphone when I went to the cinema.

✓ I forgot my smartphone when I went to the cinema.

Sentence is correct regarding singular/plural. No change needed other than fluency; it already uses singular 'smartphone' appropriately.

× I uh, I didn't get my smartphone, so I need to go back.

✓ I didn't get my smartphone, so I needed to go back.

The first clause is past ('didn't get'), so the consequence should also be past: 'needed to go back.' Mixing past and present is inconsistent. Suggestion: keep past tense for both clauses when narrating past events.

× What do you need to remember in your daily life? Student: I need to remember all the schedule of my daily life because I I'm not good at memorizing so I need to note every my plan on my smartphone and regulatory.

✓ I need to remember my daily schedule because I'm not good at memorizing, so I need to note every plan on my smartphone and set reminders.

Multiple issues: 'all the schedule of my daily life' is ungrammatical—use 'my daily schedule.' 'I I'm' is a repetition. 'Every my plan' is incorrect; use 'every plan' or 'all my plans.' 'Regulatory' is wrong word; likely 'reminders' or 'alerts.' Suggestion: simplify and use 'set reminders' for clarity.

× I need to check. OK.

✓ I need to check it frequently.

Fragment 'I need to check.' is vague; later the student mentions frequency. Combining into 'I need to check it frequently' clarifies meaning and places adverb 'frequently' correctly after the verb. Suggestion: include object and frequency.

× Uh, I use my smartphone note application, so I check pretty frequently and I use keywords like, oh, I want to, I need to go ice cream store.

✓ I use the notes app on my smartphone, so I check it pretty frequently and I use keywords like 'I want to go to the ice cream store.'

Use of gerund/infinitive and prepositions: 'want to go to' requires 'to' before the destination. 'Note application' is unnatural; 'notes app' or 'note app' is better. Also add the article 'the ice cream store.' Suggestion: use 'want to go to' + place, and 'notes app.'

× I will memorize ice cream.

✓ I'll remember to buy ice cream.

'Memorize ice cream' is incorrect: you don't memorize an object; you remember to do something. 'Will' future is acceptable but 'remember to buy ice cream' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'remember to' + verb for intentions, or 'I'll remember' for future recall.