Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽고 내용이 명확하지만, 문장 길이가 다소 길고 중복되는 표현이 있습니다. 좀 더 간결하고 효과적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I used to be good at memorizing when I was young, but now I often forget things I just heard, including my family's phone numbers except my own.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

Ejemplo: I used to be good at memorizing when I was young, but now I often forget things I just heard, including my family's phone numbers except my own.

Sugerencia: 답변이 구체적이고 자연스럽지만, 연결어 사용이 부족해 문장 간 흐름이 다소 단절됩니다. 'For example' 외에도 'also'나 'moreover' 같은 연결어를 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: For example, I have forgotten utility bill due dates and also my wallet or umbrella a few times. Moreover, the most memorable incident recently was when I forgot the front door password and had to call my younger sibling.

Sugerencia: 답변이 명확하고 구체적이며 연결어도 적절히 사용되었습니다. 다만, 'among them' 대신 'especially' 같은 표현을 사용하면 더 자연스럽고 간결해집니다. 또한, 'otherwise' 앞에 쉼표를 넣어 문장 구조를 명확히 하는 것이 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: There are many things I need to remember in my daily life, but especially my payday, because that is when my bank account balance is the highest. It is also very important to remember my family's birthdays, otherwise, they might be very upset.

Sugerencia: 답변이 매우 자연스럽고 구체적이며, 연결어도 적절히 사용되었습니다. 다만, 'Then' 대신 'So'나 'Therefore'를 사용하면 더 논리적인 흐름을 만들 수 있습니다. 또한, 'mark it big on the calendar' 대신 'mark it clearly on the calendar'가 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: In the past, I used to make notes in my diary. However, I don't check those often these days, so I register my schedule on my phone. Therefore, an alarm sounds the day before or an hour before. If it's really important, I share it with people around me or mark it clearly on the calendar.

× Actually, I cannot remember my family's phone numbers aside from my own ones.

✓ Actually, I cannot remember my family's phone numbers aside from my own.

The word 'ones' is unnecessary here because 'my own' already implies possession of the phone number. Using 'ones' is redundant and incorrect in this context.