Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且内容有些重复。建议简化表达，避免使用口头语“uh”，并且提供更具体的例子。

Ejemplo: I'm not very good at memorising things because I tend to be careless. For instance, I often forget my earphones and electronic devices, which sometimes causes problems when I want to play games.

Sugerencia: 回答表达基本清晰，但语法和用词有误，如“gave by”应为“given by”。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，并丰富细节。

Ejemplo: Yes, last summer I lost my iPhone, which was very important to me. I bought it when I was young, and it was a gift given by my grandpa, so it had sentimental value.

Sugerencia: 回答较长且有些重复，语法不够准确。建议简洁表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅，并具体说明电子设备的用途。

Ejemplo: In my daily life, I need to remember to bring my homework to school to submit it on time. Also, I always carry my electronic device to help me study, do research, and complete assignments.

Sugerencia: 表达不够自然，句子结构混乱。建议使用更自然的表达方式，明确说明写下和自我提醒的作用。

Ejemplo: I usually write important things down as a reminder, so I can check them later. Besides, I also repeat them to myself to make sure I don't forget.

× I had a bad memory.

✓ I have a bad memory.

这里描述的是现在的记忆力状况，应该用现在时态，而不是过去时态。

× For example, I usually forget the earphones and the electronic device that makes me cause an on game lag.

✓ For example, I usually forget the earphones and the electronic device, which causes me to have lag during games.

原句结构混乱，'makes me cause an on game lag'不符合英语表达习惯，应该改为'which causes me to have lag during games'，使句子通顺且语义明确。

× Well, last summer holiday I just lost an iPhone, which is quite important for me.

✓ Well, last summer holiday I lost an iPhone, which was quite important to me.

描述过去发生的事情，'lost'用过去时正确，但'which is quite important for me'应改为过去时态'was quite important to me'，因为事件发生在过去。

× it's a present that gave by my grandpa.

✓ it's a present that was given by my grandpa.

被动语态中，动词应使用过去分词形式，'gave'是过去式，正确形式应为'was given'。

× I should remember to bring my homework to the school so that I can submit it on time and I also need to bring my electronic device to the school so that I can use to work and to learn and also to research the things.

✓ I should remember to bring my homework to school so that I can submit it on time, and I also need to bring my electronic device to school so that I can use it to work, learn, and research things.

'to the school'在这里不需要定冠词'the'，应直接用' to school'。另外，'use to work and to learn and also to research the things'缺少宾语，需加'it'，且'research the things'表达不自然，改为'research things'更合适。

× Well, I usually will write it down so that it's a hard evidence that can show I can read on and also I can keep telling myself in my mind so that I will not forget.

✓ Well, I usually write it down so that it's hard evidence showing I can refer to it, and I also keep telling myself in my mind so that I will not forget.

'a hard evidence'中'evidence'是不可数名词，不用加冠词'a'。'can show I can read on'表达不清，应改为'hard evidence showing I can refer to it'。此外，'usually will write'时态搭配不当，改为'standard present tense'更自然。