Machine— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达。

Ejemplo: My favourite machine at home is the robot in my bedroom. My mother bought it to help us mop and wash the floor.

Sugerencia: 回答中有语法和用词错误，如“watch and sweep them”不准确，建议使用更恰当的词汇，并注意句子连贯性。

Ejemplo: In the past, washing and sweeping machines were very important because they saved us a lot of time. However, with modern technology, some machines can clean themselves, so we don't need to worry about them as much.

Sugerencia: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并避免口语化和重复。

Ejemplo: Some people, like my parents, need to read instructions to use new machines. But I am young and can usually figure out how to use them without reading the manual.

Sugerencia: 回答较为自然，但结尾“yeah”显得口语化且不正式，建议使用更正式的表达，并增加连接词使句子更流畅。

Ejemplo: It depends. For simple devices with obvious functions, reading instructions is not necessary. However, for complex machines or robots with unfamiliar functions, it is important to read the instructions carefully.

× I would say it is the robot in my in my bedroom and it is brought my by my mother because she wanted to render the robot become our helper of mopping and washing the floor.

✓ I would say it is the robot in my bedroom and it was brought to me by my mother because she wanted to make the robot become our helper for mopping and washing the floor.

这里“brought my by my mother”是错误的过去分词用法，正确应该是“was brought to me by my mother”，表示被动语态的过去分词形式。同时，“render the robot become”用法不当，应该用“make the robot become”或“make the robot our helper”。此外，“helper of mopping”应改为“helper for mopping”，介词使用错误。

× I would say it is the robot in my in my bedroom and it is brought my by my mother because she wanted to render the robot become our helper of mopping and washing the floor.

✓ I would say it is the robot in my bedroom and it was brought to me by my mother because she wanted to make the robot become our helper for mopping and washing the floor.

介词使用错误，“brought my by my mother”应为“brought to me by my mother”，表示动作的接受者。还有“helper of mopping”应改为“helper for mopping”，表示用途。

× I would say it is the robot in my in my bedroom and it is brought my by my mother because she wanted to render the robot become our helper of mopping and washing the floor.

✓ I would say it is the robot in my bedroom and it was brought to me by my mother because she wanted to make the robot become our helper for mopping and washing the floor.

“brought my by my mother”中“my”用法错误，应该用宾格“me”，即“brought to me”。

× Well, in the past I would answer like yes, it's pretty significant to watch and sweep them.

✓ Well, in the past I would answer yes, it's pretty significant to wash and sweep them.

“answer like yes”中“like”用法错误，应直接说“answer yes”。另外，“watch and sweep”应为“wash and sweep”，可能是拼写错误。

× Well, in the past I would answer like yes, it's pretty significant to watch and sweep them.

✓ Well, in the past I would answer yes, it's pretty significant to wash and sweep them.

“answer like yes”中“like”用法错误，应直接说“answer yes”。

× They can clean and wash themselves by themselves, so it's unnecessary for us to bother.

✓ They can clean and wash themselves, so it's unnecessary for us to bother.

“themselves by themselves”重复，冗余，应去掉“by themselves”。

× I think it's a course for some someone like my parents, they cannot get a good command of new machines and technology.

✓ I think it's a course for someone like my parents; they cannot get a good command of new machines and technology.

“some someone”重复，应去掉“some”。另外，两个分句之间应使用分号或句号分开。

× However, As for me, a young person, you know right, we can master the machine by ourselves, so it's unnecessary to check the instruction.

✓ However, as for me, a young person, you know, we can master the machine by ourselves, so it's unnecessary to check the instructions.

“you know right”表达不自然，改为“you know”。“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，因为通常说明书是复数形式。

× However, As for me, a young person, you know right, we can master the machine by ourselves, so it's unnecessary to check the instruction.

✓ However, as for me, a young person, you know, we can master the machine by ourselves, so it's unnecessary to check the instructions.

“instruction”前应加复数形式，且通常用复数“instructions”，表示说明书。

× Well, it depends. For something normal and evident showing its function, I think it's unnecessary to check the instruction.

✓ Well, it depends. For something normal and evident showing its function, I think it's unnecessary to check the instructions.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，表示说明书。

× However, for some robots and machines which appear so strange and we cannot grasp the function, we should check the instruction, yeah.

✓ However, for some robots and machines that appear so strange and whose functions we cannot grasp, we should check the instructions, yeah.

“which appear so strange and we cannot grasp the function”结构不完整，应改为“that appear so strange and whose functions we cannot grasp”，使句子结构完整且逻辑清晰。