Machine— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to avoid redundancy and improve clarity. For example, instead of repeating 'washing machine' and 'laundries', you can say: "My favourite machine is definitely the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. I can simply put all my clothes in, and it washes them automatically." Also, watch out for word choice, like 'word' should be 'work'.

Ejemplo: My favourite machine is definitely the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. I can simply put all my clothes in, and it washes them automatically.

Sugerencia: Improve sentence structure and use linking words for coherence. For example, you can say: "Yes, definitely. These machines save a lot of time because before owning them, I had to do all the cleaning manually, which was very time-consuming. Therefore, having these machines allows me to use my time more efficiently for work or study."

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. These machines save a lot of time because before owning them, I had to do all the cleaning manually, which was very time-consuming. Therefore, having these machines allows me to use my time more efficiently for work or study.

Sugerencia: Focus on grammar and clarity. For example, say: "I read instructions for complicated machines when I use them for the first time. However, for everyday machines like washing machines or hair dryers, I usually don't read the instructions."

Ejemplo: I read instructions for complicated machines when I use them for the first time. However, for everyday machines like washing machines or hair dryers, I usually don't read the instructions.

Sugerencia: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar. For example: "Yes, I think it is important to read instructions. My parents and teachers often remind me to do so because I have experienced failures due to not reading instructions carefully, such as during exams."

Ejemplo: Yes, I think it is important to read instructions. My parents and teachers often remind me to do so because I have experienced failures due to not reading instructions carefully, such as during exams.

× My favorite machine will definitely be my washing machine because it greatly reduced the word that I have to do every day so I don't have to do my laundries by myself.

✓ My favorite machine is definitely my washing machine because it greatly reduces the work that I have to do every day so I don't have to do my laundry by myself.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'will definitely be' to describe a current preference, which should be in the present tense. Also, 'reduced' is past tense but the meaning is ongoing, so 'reduces' is correct. 'Word' is a typo and should be 'work'. 'Laundries' is incorrect plural; 'laundry' is uncountable and should be singular.

× My favorite machine will definitely be my washing machine because it greatly reduced the word that I have to do every day so I don't have to do my laundries by myself.

✓ My favorite machine is definitely my washing machine because it greatly reduces the work that I have to do every day so I don't have to do my laundry by myself.

The word 'laundries' is incorrect because 'laundry' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Use 'laundry' instead.

× I can just randomly throw everything I have to wash to the machine and the washing machine will automatically wash it for me.

✓ I can just randomly throw everything I have to wash into the machine and the washing machine will automatically wash it for me.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to indicate putting things inside a machine is 'into'.

× Yes, definitely, because it saves a lot of my times before when I don't have those machines, I have to do everything by my hands, which waste lots of my time.

✓ Yes, definitely, because it saves a lot of my time. Before, when I didn't have those machines, I had to do everything by hand, which wasted a lot of my time.

'Times' should be 'time' as it is uncountable here. 'By my hands' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'by hand'. Also, verb tenses are corrected to past tense for past events.

× Yes, definitely, because it saves a lot of my times before when I don't have those machines, I have to do everything by my hands, which waste lots of my time.

✓ Yes, definitely, because it saves a lot of my time. Before, when I didn't have those machines, I had to do everything by hand, which wasted a lot of my time.

The sentence refers to past events, so 'don't have' and 'have to do' should be in past tense: 'didn't have' and 'had to do'. Also, 'waste' should be 'wasted' to agree with past tense.

× By owning the two machines, the time that I saved for myself can largely increase my working or studying efficiency.

✓ By owning the two machines, the time that I save for myself can largely increase my working or studying efficiency.

The phrase 'the time that I saved' suggests past tense, but the meaning is ongoing, so present tense 'save' is appropriate.

× I do read instructions for some of the complicated machines that is the first time in used.

✓ I do read instructions for some of the complicated machines that I use for the first time.

The phrase 'that is the first time in used' is incorrect. It should be 'that I use for the first time' to correctly express the meaning.

× But for those machines such as washing machine or hair dryers, those type of machines that we normally use it every day, I don't have to read instructions.

✓ But for those machines such as washing machines or hair dryers, those types of machines that we normally use every day, I don't have to read instructions.

'Washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'hair dryers'. 'Those type' should be 'those types' to agree in number. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× I mean my parents and my teachers, they always penalize me for not reading the instructions properly.

✓ I mean, my parents and my teachers always penalize me for not reading the instructions properly.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after mentioning 'my parents and my teachers'. Removing 'they' improves sentence clarity.

× I've I had a few of the experience of the failure time that is just due to how I don't read instructions properly and informations properly, for example during my exams.

✓ I've had a few experiences of failure that were just due to not reading instructions and information properly, for example during my exams.

The phrase 'I've I had' is incorrect; 'I've had' is correct. 'Experience' should be plural 'experiences'. 'Failure time' is awkward; 'failure' suffices. 'Informations' is uncountable and should be 'information'. Verb tenses are corrected for clarity.