Machine— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and natural.

Ejemplo: My favourite machine at home is my mobile phone because it helps me communicate with my family and friends. Additionally, it provides resources for my studies, making it an essential tool in my daily life.

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific reasons or examples. Also, avoid vague phrases and grammatical mistakes to make your answer more natural and effective.

Ejemplo: I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort. However, some people might become less active since they rely on these machines for household chores.

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reason using linking words. Try to use more natural expressions and correct sentence structures.

Ejemplo: To be honest, I usually don't read instructions before using a machine because I find them boring. Instead, I prefer to figure out how to assemble or fix the products by myself.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Make sure to answer directly and provide clear supporting details with proper linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and try to express your ideas more clearly and naturally.

Ejemplo: I think reading instructions is important for some machines because without them, it can be difficult to assemble or use the product correctly. However, nowadays, many people watch YouTube videos as an alternative way to learn how to use machines.

× We'll get our many messages, which is crucial for me.

✓ We get many messages, which is crucial for me.

The phrase 'our many messages' is incorrect because 'our' is a possessive pronoun that does not fit here and 'many messages' is plural. The correct phrase is 'We get many messages' to indicate receiving multiple messages. Also, 'We'll get' (we will get) is future tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'We get' is more appropriate.

× However, mobile phone is the most needed thing for me because it allows me to communicate the resource for my studies and also help me to stay connected with my friends and family.

✓ However, the mobile phone is the most needed thing for me because it allows me to communicate resources for my studies and also helps me to stay connected with my friends and family.

The noun 'mobile phone' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific object. Also, 'communicate the resource' is incorrect; it should be 'communicate resources' (plural) or 'communicate as a resource'. Additionally, 'help me' should be 'helps me' to agree with the singular subject 'mobile phone' (third person singular).

× I will, I have never thought about it but I suppose they kind of make people lazy.

✓ I haven't, I have never thought about it but I suppose they kind of make people lazy.

The phrase 'I will' is incorrect here as it does not fit the context. The student likely meant 'I haven't' (I have not) to indicate they have never thought about it. Modal verb 'will' is used for future actions, which is not appropriate here.

× Because of its research people tend to rely on it more than before and it makes people a bit not willing to do any other tax.

✓ Because of this research, people tend to rely on it more than before and it makes people a bit unwilling to do any other tasks.

'Its research' is incorrect because 'its' refers to possession by an object previously mentioned, which is unclear here. 'This research' is appropriate. Also, 'a bit not willing' is awkward; 'a bit unwilling' is correct. 'Tax' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'tasks'.

× Also end desire for more convenient.

✓ Also, there is a desire for more convenience.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'there is' completes the sentence. 'More convenient' is an adjective; the noun form 'convenience' is needed here.

× Are to be honest, I never read any instruction, in fact I have never read any one of those because I simply find it boring and I just have to fix an assemble my products on myself.

✓ To be honest, I never read any instructions; in fact, I have never read any of them because I simply find it boring and I just have to fix and assemble my products myself.

'Are to be honest' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'To be honest'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to general instructions. 'Any one of those' is better as 'any of them'. 'Fix an assemble' should be 'fix and assemble'. 'On myself' is incorrect; 'myself' alone suffices.

× Well, for some kinds of missing it is very important to read instructions simply because without instruction they cannot be reassembled or joined.

✓ Well, for some kinds of machines, it is very important to read instructions simply because without instructions they cannot be reassembled or joined.

'Missing' is a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'machines'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring generally. 'They' correctly refers to machines here.

× But according to me watching it, it is just users simply because there are other form of things.

✓ But according to me, watching it is just for users because there are other forms of things.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks clarity. Adding commas and correcting 'form' to 'forms' improves clarity. 'Watching it is just for users' is a better structure.

× You can use an example like YouTube videos and.

✓ You can use examples like YouTube videos.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and'. Removing 'and' and completing the sentence improves clarity.