Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is a bit repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and clear by directly answering the question first, then giving a specific example. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. However, if someone speaks to me rudely or aggressively, I tend to lose my patience because I find it hard to tolerate disrespectful behaviour.

Sugerencia: Your response has grammatical mistakes and is somewhat unclear. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words for better flow.

Ejemplo: I feel impatient mainly when people speak to me rudely or disrespect my opinions. For instance, if someone ignores what I say or behaves badly, I find it difficult to stay calm.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to organise your ideas logically, use linking words, and avoid redundancy. Provide specific examples and explain your feelings clearly.

Ejemplo: I usually feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because my concentration decreases. For example, while studying, I cannot focus for more than an hour, which makes me uncomfortable and increases my stress and anxiety.

Sugerencia: Your answer is brief but clear. To improve, you can expand slightly by explaining why patience might be important in future jobs, using linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I am currently a student and do not have a job yet. However, I believe that patience will be important in any future job because it helps in dealing with challenges and working well with others.

Sugerencia: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat confusing. Try to clearly compare your past and present patience levels with specific reasons, using linking words for clarity.

Ejemplo: I am less patient now than when I was a child because I tend to get aggressive even during small arguments. In the past, I believe I was more patient and calm in such situations.

× whenever anybody talks me in aggressive way or in rude way and say me the unusual things at that time I become aggressive at that time.

✓ whenever anybody talks to me in an aggressive way or in a rude way and says unusual things to me at that time I become aggressive.

The verb 'talk' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating the person being spoken to. Also, 'say me' is incorrect; it should be 'say to me' or better 'says to me'. The article 'an' is needed before 'aggressive way' and 'rude way' because these are singular countable nouns. Repetition of 'at that time' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× I don't have patience in myself because I can't bother the persons who say me the unusual things.

✓ I don't have patience in myself because I can't tolerate the people who say unusual things to me.

The phrase 'say me' is incorrect; it should be 'say to me'. Also, 'bother' is not appropriate here; 'tolerate' fits better. 'Persons' is less common than 'people' in this context.

× There are many things which feel me impatient like whenever somebody talks me rudely or they are disrespecting of my words and whenever I feel like they are not behaving good with me.

✓ There are many things which make me feel impatient, like whenever somebody talks to me rudely or disrespects my words, and whenever I feel like they are not behaving well towards me.

The verb 'feel' is not used with 'me' in this way; 'make me feel' is correct. 'Talks me rudely' should be 'talks to me rudely'. 'Disrespecting of my words' is incorrect; 'disrespects my words' is correct. 'Behaving good' should be 'behaving well'. 'With me' is better expressed as 'towards me'.

× At that time I become the impatient because I can't bother something unusual.

✓ At that time I become impatient because I can't tolerate something unusual.

'The impatient' is incorrect; 'impatient' is an adjective and does not need 'the'. 'Bother something unusual' is incorrect; 'tolerate something unusual' is appropriate.

× I feel very bored because I can't concentrate for a long time on the one work.

✓ I feel very bored because I can't concentrate on one task for a long time.

The phrase 'concentrate for a long time on the one work' is awkward. The correct preposition is 'concentrate on'. 'The one work' should be 'one task' or 'one piece of work'.

× For example in my studies also I can't concentrate for more than one hour because it makes me very uncomfortable and it helps.

✓ For example, in my studies, I also can't concentrate for more than one hour because it makes me very uncomfortable and stressed.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'It helps' is incorrect in this context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and meaning.

× It also reduces my It also increases my anxiety level and stress level.

✓ It also increases my anxiety and stress levels.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. The correction combines the ideas clearly and grammatically.

× Well, I don't do any job still because I am a student, so in future I'll think about this.

✓ Well, I don't have a job yet because I am a student, so in the future I'll think about this.

'Don't do any job still' is incorrect; 'don't have a job yet' is correct. 'In future' should be 'in the future'.

× No, at a particular time I'm not a more patient person because I feel aggressive even on small argues also.

✓ No, at that particular time I was not a very patient person because I felt aggressive even during small arguments.

'At a particular time' is better as 'at that particular time'. 'I'm not a more patient person' is incorrect; past tense 'was not a very patient person' fits better. 'Small argues' is incorrect; 'small arguments' is correct. 'Also' is unnecessary here.

× So in the past I feel like I was more patient person rather than now.

✓ So in the past I felt like I was a more patient person than I am now.

The verb 'feel' should be in past tense 'felt' to match 'in the past'. 'More patient person' needs the article 'a'. 'Rather than now' is better expressed as 'than I am now'.