Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Ваш ответ содержит некоторые грамматические ошибки и не совсем естественные выражения, например, "tremendous or determined cases" и "most of my friends also called me like I'm tedious". Рекомендуется использовать более простые и естественные фразы, а также избегать излишней длины и повторов.

Ejemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. In difficult situations, I usually stay calm and composed. My friends often say that I am calm and don't show my emotions easily.

Sugerencia: Ответ содержит ошибки в построении предложений и словоупотреблении, например, "a lot places or children that can scream or behave improper". Следует использовать более точные и грамматически правильные выражения, а также связать идеи с помощью союзов.

Ejemplo: It depends on the situation, but I often feel impatient when I am in noisy places or when children scream and behave badly. These situations make me lose my patience.

Sugerencia: Ответ содержит неестественные выражения и грамматические ошибки, например, "I like keep myself in cage". Рекомендуется использовать более простые и понятные фразы, избегать противоречий и излишних деталей.

Ejemplo: When I have to do something for a long time, it can be boring, but I try to stay patient and focused. I understand that persistence is important to achieve good results.

Sugerencia: Ответ понятен, но можно улучшить связность и убрать повторения, например, дважды использовать "therefore". Также стоит использовать более естественные выражения.

Ejemplo: I don't have a job because I'm a teenager, but studying requires a lot of patience. I try to be patient because I want to gain knowledge and eventually get a master's degree.

Sugerencia: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неестественные выражения, например, "used to be distracted" и "lose my control and concentration about something". Рекомендуется использовать более простые и правильные конструкции и связать идеи логично.

Ejemplo: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was young, I was easily distracted by things around me, especially when I was outside. It was hard to concentrate back then.

× Well, from my perspective, yes I do think that I'm a patient person and in such a tremendous or determined cases I can stay calm and most of my friends also called me like I'm tedious and also without any emotions.

✓ Well, from my perspective, yes I do think that I'm a patient person and in such tremendous or determined cases I can stay calm, and most of my friends also call me tedious and without any emotions.

The phrase 'called me like I'm tedious' is incorrect. The verb 'called' should be in the present tense 'call' to agree with 'most of my friends' (plural subject) and the phrase 'like I'm tedious' is awkward; it should be 'call me tedious'. Also, 'such a tremendous or determined cases' is incorrect because 'cases' is plural and 'a' is singular; it should be 'such tremendous or determined cases'. This corrects subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× Well, it depends on the situations, but I know that a lot places or children that can scream or behave improper for me.

✓ Well, it depends on the situations, but I know that a lot of places or children can scream or behave improperly for me.

The phrase 'a lot places' is missing the preposition 'of' after 'a lot'. Also, 'behave improper' is incorrect; the adverb 'improperly' should be used to modify the verb 'behave'. This corrects preposition and adverb usage.

× Therefore I can be impatient in these cases.

✓ Therefore, I can be impatient in these cases.

A comma is needed after 'Therefore' to separate the introductory adverb from the main clause, improving sentence clarity and correctness.

× While making deals for a long time can be boring and also tedious for me, but as I said before, I'm a patient person therefore I strive to keep myself to do something for a long time and also I like keep myself in cage.

✓ Making deals for a long time can be boring and tedious for me, but as I said before, I'm a patient person; therefore, I strive to keep myself doing something for a long time, and I also like to keep myself in a cage.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions ('while' and 'but') and awkward phrasing. 'While making deals for a long time' is better as 'Making deals for a long time'. The phrase 'keep myself to do something' is incorrect; it should be 'keep myself doing something'. Also, 'like keep myself in cage' should be 'like to keep myself in a cage'. Punctuation is added for clarity.

× Well, I'm just a teenager therefore I don't have a job but I have to study.

✓ Well, I'm just a teenager; therefore, I don't have a job, but I have to study.

A semicolon and commas are needed to properly separate independent clauses and introductory adverbs for correct sentence structure.

× Therefore I strive to be patient while I'm studying and also because I need to get a higher knowledge to get a master's degree.

✓ Therefore, I strive to be patient while I'm studying because I need to gain more knowledge to get a master's degree.

'A higher knowledge' is incorrect; 'knowledge' is uncountable and does not take 'a' or comparative forms like 'higher'. Instead, 'more knowledge' is appropriate. Also, 'gain' is a better verb than 'get' in this context. Comma added after 'Therefore' for clarity.

× Surely as a child I was used to be distracted by something.

✓ Surely, as a child, I was used to being distracted by something.

The phrase 'used to be distracted' is incorrect. The correct form is 'used to being distracted' because 'used to' followed by a verb in the '-ing' form expresses accustomed actions. Commas added for clarity.

× For instance, while I was outdoors, I was curious about something that's around me and therefore I can easily lose my control and concentration about something.

✓ For instance, while I was outdoors, I was curious about things around me, and therefore I could easily lose my control and concentration on something.

'That's around me' should be 'things around me' for clarity. 'Lose my control and concentration about something' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' for 'concentration'. Also, 'can' should be 'could' to maintain past tense consistency.