Snacks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to make your sentences more natural and complete, and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I usually eat snacks while watching movies or take some to school because it helps me stay energized." Also, avoid grammatical errors like "during watching"; instead, say "while watching."

Ejemplo: I usually eat snacks while watching movies at home, and I also take some healthy snacks to school to keep my energy up throughout the day.

Sugerencia: Your answer is good but incomplete and has some repetition. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "It depends on the type of snacks. Many snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats, which can cause health problems like obesity or diabetes. However, if you choose healthier options such as fruits, snacks can be beneficial."

Ejemplo: It depends on the type of snacks. Many snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats, which can cause health problems like obesity or diabetes. However, if you choose healthier options such as fruits or nuts, snacks can be good for your health.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like "I was a neighbor of the harmful facts." Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. For example, say "Yes, I often ate snacks like chips and sweets when I was young. Looking back, I realize these habits were unhealthy." Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often ate snacks like chips and sweets when I was young. Looking back, I realize these habits were unhealthy and I try to avoid them now.

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but a bit vague and wordy. Try to be more specific about the snacks you like and use clearer language. For example, "Nowadays, I prefer healthy snacks like fruits and nuts because I have some health issues from my past habits, so I carefully choose what I eat."

Ejemplo: Nowadays, I prefer healthy snacks like fruits and nuts because I have some health issues from my past habits, so I carefully choose what I eat.

× Well, I commonly prefer to consume snacks during watching some movies and take some snacks with me to school because it can maintain my.

✓ Well, I commonly prefer to consume snacks while watching some movies and take some snacks with me to school because it can maintain my energy.

The phrase 'during watching' is incorrect because 'during' should be followed by a noun or noun phrase, not a verb in the -ing form. The correct preposition here is 'while' which can be followed by a verb in the -ing form to indicate simultaneous actions. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; adding 'energy' clarifies the meaning.

× Well, I commonly prefer to consume snacks during watching some movies and take some snacks with me to school because it can maintain my.

✓ Well, I commonly prefer to consume snacks while watching some movies and take some snacks with me to school because they can maintain my energy.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly to refer to 'snacks' which is plural. The correct pronoun should be 'they' to agree in number with 'snacks'. Also, the sentence was incomplete; adding 'energy' completes the thought.

× Well, it depends on the type of snacks you eat. For example, many snacks are junk food because they contain they contain a lot of sugar and also unhealthy fats which can lead to health problems such as obesity or even diabetes. However, if you choose healthier options like fruits.

✓ Well, it depends on the type of snacks you eat. For example, many snacks are junk food because they contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats, which can lead to health problems such as obesity or even diabetes. However, if you choose healthier options like fruits, it is better for your health.

The phrase 'they contain they contain' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'they contain'. The sentence 'However, if you choose healthier options like fruits.' is incomplete and needs a main clause to complete the thought. Adding 'it is better for your health' completes the sentence logically.

× Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I was a neighbor of the harmful facts on a person's health. For example, I used to enjoy eating chips and sweets almost everyday. Looking back, I realized that these habits were not very healthy for me.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young despite knowing the harmful effects on a person's health. For example, I used to enjoy eating chips and sweets almost every day. Looking back, I realize that these habits were not very healthy for me.

The phrase 'I was a neighbor of the harmful facts' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with 'despite knowing the harmful effects' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct adverb is 'every day'. 'Realized' is changed to 'realize' to maintain present reflection.

× Well, nowadays I tend to purchase healthy meals because I have some health problems due to my harmful past habits and I really control my products that I consume.

✓ Well, nowadays I tend to purchase healthy meals because I have some health problems due to my harmful past habits and I carefully control the products that I consume.

The phrase 'I really control my products' is awkward and unclear. Replacing 'really' with 'carefully' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'my products' is vague; 'the products that I consume' is more precise.