Snacks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to avoid repetition and filler words like 'with a with a' and 'around around'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details logically.

Ejemplo: I usually eat snacks in the evening while sipping coffee. I enjoy this time with my siblings and parents because it refreshes our minds and helps us relax after a long day.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing because you mixed up healthy and unhealthy snacks. Be clear and specific about which snacks are healthy or unhealthy. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas and avoid ambiguity.

Ejemplo: It depends on the type of snacks. For example, roasted makhanas and roasted dals are healthy and beneficial, but packaged snacks like Kurkure and chips are unhealthy and should be eaten sparingly.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and complete your thoughts fully.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I used to eat snacks throughout the day. For instance, my mother gave me packets of Kurkure at school, and I often ate chocolates at home. This habit was unhealthy, but I have changed it now.

Sugerencia: Make sure your sentences are grammatically correct and complete. Use linking words like 'however' or 'now' to show contrast between past and present preferences. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: During my childhood, I preferred packaged snacks, especially chips. However, as I have grown up and become more health-conscious, I now prefer roasted makhanas with a cup of coffee, which not only tastes good but also helps me relax.

× I usually munch on snacks during the Evening Times with a with a sip of coffee.

✓ I usually munch on snacks during the evening with a sip of coffee.

The phrase 'during the Evening Times' is unnatural and incorrect. 'During the evening' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate the time when the action happens. Also, 'Evening Times' is not a standard expression in English.

× I usually do that with my siblings and my parents around around me and we are all are very, uh, fascinated about having snacks in the evening hour which refresh our minds and enhance our.

✓ I usually do that with my siblings and my parents around me, and we are all very fascinated by having snacks in the evening, which refreshes our minds and enhances us.

The phrase 'around around me' is a repetition error. Also, 'fascinated about' should be 'fascinated by'. The clause 'which refresh our minds and enhance our' is incomplete and needs correction to 'which refreshes our minds and enhances us' to maintain subject-verb agreement and completeness.

× If it's unhealthy like fried makanas, roasted dals it will have a beneficial effect on health.

✓ If it's unhealthy like fried makhanas or roasted dals, it will have a harmful effect on health.

The sentence incorrectly states that unhealthy snacks have a beneficial effect, which is contradictory. Also, 'makanas' should be 'makhanas'. The modal verb 'will' is used correctly, but the meaning needs correction to reflect health impact accurately.

× If it's non healthy like leaves, kurukure packaged fruit package it has.

✓ If it's unhealthy like leaves, Kurkure, or packaged fruit, it has a negative effect.

'Non healthy' should be 'unhealthy'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'or' and clarifying the items improves clarity. 'Kurkure' is a brand name and should be capitalized. The sentence needs completion to convey the intended meaning.

× Honestly speaking, I was involved. I was that kind of person who used to eat snacks whole day like in in school my mother used to give up packets of Kurukure and lace and in home I just when I come back I will have a a couple of chocolates.

✓ Honestly speaking, I was that kind of person who used to eat snacks the whole day. In school, my mother used to give me packets of Kurkure and lace, and at home, when I came back, I would have a couple of chocolates.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing. 'Used to eat snacks whole day' should be 'used to eat snacks the whole day'. 'Give up packets' should be 'give me packets'. 'In home' should be 'at home'. 'When I come back I will have' should be 'when I came back, I would have' to maintain past tense consistency.

× In during my childhood, I used to prefer packaged items, specially chips and as I grown up, when I am more motivated towards healthy eating habits, I prefer having roasted makhana with a cup of coffee, which not only relief.

✓ During my childhood, I used to prefer packaged items, especially chips, and as I grew up, when I became more motivated towards healthy eating habits, I prefer having roasted makhana with a cup of coffee, which not only relieves.

'In during' is incorrect; use 'During'. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. 'As I grown up' should be 'as I grew up'. 'When I am more motivated' should be 'when I became more motivated' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Relief' is a noun; the verb form 'relieves' is correct here.