Snacks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using linking words. For example, mention specific times or situations when you eat snacks and describe the types of snacks briefly.

Ejemplo: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon when I feel hungry or bored. For instance, I enjoy crispy snacks like potato chips because they are tasty and satisfying.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Use linking words to contrast ideas and be specific about which snacks are healthy or unhealthy. Avoid vague phrases and try to form complete sentences with correct grammar.

Ejemplo: I don't think most snacks are healthy, especially those bought from shops because they can cause health problems. However, some snacks like fruits and nuts are healthy and good for me.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more natural. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly, and correct grammar mistakes. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother was concerned about my health, so she avoided giving me snacks.

Sugerencia: Good content but try to improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about why you like these snacks.

Ejemplo: I love eating fruits and nuts because they are healthy and provide energy. Moreover, they make me feel calm and comfortable, which is why I enjoy them a lot.

× Yeah, nowadays I often eat snacks, especially when I, uh, feel hungry and boring.

✓ Yeah, nowadays I often eat snacks, especially when I, uh, feel hungry and bored.

The word 'boring' is an adjective describing something that causes boredom, but here the student wants to describe their own feeling, so the correct adjective is 'bored'. Use 'bored' to express a feeling of being uninterested or tired of something.

× Uh, that time I really enjoy eating snacks, especially I enjoy the delicious crispy snacks that.

✓ At that time, I really enjoy eating snacks, especially the delicious crispy ones.

The original sentence has awkward structure and an incomplete phrase 'snacks that'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical structure by using 'At that time' and replacing 'snacks that' with 'ones' to refer back to 'snacks'.

× Not at all, but some of the snacks may provide healthy for me at the same time more than that purchase from the shops that make some health issues on.

✓ Not at all, but some of the snacks may be healthy for me, while others purchased from shops may cause some health issues.

The word 'healthy' is an adjective and needs a linking verb 'be' to describe 'snacks'. The original sentence is also unclear and ungrammatical; the correction clarifies meaning and corrects grammar.

× No, I didn't eat that much of snacks when I was young because my mother concern about my health condition that's why she avoided to provide the snacks for me and I didn't expect the snacks at when I am young.

✓ No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother was concerned about my health condition. That's why she avoided providing snacks for me, and I didn't expect snacks when I was young.

The verb 'concern' should be in past tense 'was concerned' to match the past context. 'Avoided to provide' is incorrect; the correct form is 'avoided providing'. Also, 'didn't expect the snacks at when I am young' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'didn't expect snacks when I was young' to maintain past tense and clarity.

× No, I didn't eat that much of snacks when I was young because my mother concern about my health condition that's why she avoided to provide the snacks for me and I didn't expect the snacks at when I am young.

✓ No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother was concerned about my health condition. That's why she avoided providing snacks for me, and I didn't expect snacks when I was young.

The phrase 'that much of snacks' is incorrect; 'much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'snacks' is countable plural. The correct quantifier is 'many' for countable plural nouns.

× No, I didn't eat that much of snacks when I was young because my mother concern about my health condition that's why she avoided to provide the snacks for me and I didn't expect the snacks at when I am young.

✓ No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother was concerned about my health condition. That's why she avoided providing snacks for me, and I didn't expect snacks when I was young.

The phrase 'concern about' is correct, but the original sentence lacks the correct verb form and prepositions. Also, 'avoided to provide' is incorrect; 'avoided providing' is the correct form. The preposition 'at' before 'when I am young' is unnecessary and removed.

× No, I didn't eat that much of snacks when I was young because my mother concern about my health condition that's why she avoided to provide the snacks for me and I didn't expect the snacks at when I am young.

✓ No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother was concerned about my health condition. That's why she avoided providing snacks for me, and I didn't expect snacks when I was young.

The phrase 'when I am young' is incorrect because the time referred to is in the past. It should be 'when I was young' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Absolutely. I love to eat fruits and nuts. It's very healthy for my body and makes me feel very calm and comfortable and boost my energy. That's I love it a lot and very delicious.

✓ Absolutely. I love to eat fruits and nuts. They're very healthy for my body and make me feel very calm and comfortable and boost my energy. That's why I love them a lot; they are very delicious.

The pronoun 'It' is incorrect when referring to plural nouns 'fruits and nuts'; the correct pronoun is 'They' or 'They're'. Also, 'That's I love it a lot' is ungrammatical; it should be 'That's why I love them a lot'. The correction improves pronoun agreement and sentence clarity.