Writing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は具体的で理由も述べられているが、言い淀みや文法ミス、冗長さが目立ちます。短く明瞭な主文を最初に置き、その後で具体例を一つか二つ挙げると良いです。また、結びの語順や冠詞・名詞の形（e.g. "papers" vs "reports"）を正しく使ってください。発話中の不要な間（"uh"など）を減らす練習もしましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I write a lot. I'm a law student, so I regularly write academic papers, such as reports for civil law courses and case briefs.

Sugerencia: 理由は明確で内容も良いですが、文法（"easily expressing"→"express"など）と語順に注意が必要です。トピック・センテンスの後に接続表現（"because"以外に"so"や"which helps me to"など）を使って、論理的につなげるとより自然です。発話は一文を短めにして流暢さを高めてください。

Ejemplo: I enjoy writing because it helps me organize my thoughts. For example, when I write, I can clarify ideas and express them more precisely than I can when speaking.

Sugerencia: 答えはやや抽象的で不完全です（最後の文が不明瞭）。具体的に何が変わるのか（内容、構成、言葉遣いなど）を示し、理由を明確に説明してください。接続詞を使って理由と例を結びつける練習をしましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think what I write often changes. When I put ideas on paper, I usually revise them—I change the structure, add evidence, and improve the wording to make my argument clearer.

Sugerencia: 好みは述べられているが、語彙の選択や表現（"wear my smartphone"は不自然）が不適切です。理由を一つに絞り、具体的な状況（速さ、編集のしやすさ、携帯性）を示すと説得力が増します。冗長な語を減らし、文を簡潔にまとめてください。

Ejemplo: I prefer typing because my phone is always with me, so it's more convenient and faster to type notes than to carry paper and a pen.

Sugerencia: 正直に答えている点は良いですが、文法ミスと語順、発音の詰まりが多く、結論が不完全です（最後のフレーズが終わっていない）。否定を述べた後に代替手段を明確に述べ、理由を短く付け加えてください。語彙（"lazy person"はややカジュアル）も改善できます。

Ejemplo: I don't keep a diary regularly because I find it hard to write every day. Instead, I often take photos to help me remember important moments.

Sugerencia: 方法は複数挙げられていて良いですが、語数を整え、時制と複数形（"pictures"）や冠詞を正しく使う必要があります。項目を列挙する際は接続詞（"and"や"also"）を使って流れをスムーズにし、最後に一文でそれらがどのように役立つか簡潔に説明してください。

Ejemplo: I record my life by taking photos, keeping short notes, and scheduling events precisely in Google Calendar. These methods help me remember important dates and moments.

× Yes, I do because, uh, I'm a law school student and I have to write a lot of papers. Uh, for example, papers for civil law or, or papers are which is report and.

✓ Yes, I do because I'm a law student and I have to write many papers, for example, civil law papers or reports.

The original sentence has awkward structure, redundant fillers and incorrect phrase order ('papers are which is report'). Use 'law student' (more natural than 'law school student'), 'many papers' for countable plural, and place examples after a comma. Remove filler words and simplify for clarity. Suggestions: omit filler words like 'uh', use correct noun forms ('reports'), and follow normal English word order: subject + verb + object, then examples.

× I like writing because, uh, by writing, uh, I can. Organize what I'm thinking in my brain and I can easily expressing my thoughts rather than just speaking.

✓ I like writing because by writing I can organize what I'm thinking and I can more easily express my thoughts than just speaking.

The error is the incorrect use of 'expressing' after 'can'—modal 'can' should be followed by the base form 'express'. Also sentence fragments ('I can.' then 'Organize') must be combined. Use 'more easily' for comparative adverb placement. Suggestions: after modal verbs use base verb (can express), and keep clauses connected for coherence.

× Yes, I think so, because we cannot express our thoughts only by thinking internally. But when I express it, you can.

✓ Yes, I think so, because we cannot express our thoughts just by thinking them; when I express them, other people can understand me.

Original has unclear pronoun reference ('it') and unnatural phrasing ('thinking internally'). Use 'thoughts' (plural) consistently and clarify the result: 'other people can understand me.' Also replace 'only' with 'just' for naturalness and use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses. Suggestions: ensure pronouns clearly refer to plural nouns and state the consequence clearly.

× I like typing more because I I usually wear my smartphone with me so it's easier for me to type them, bringing paper and pencil to write down something.

✓ I prefer typing because I usually carry my smartphone with me, so it's easier for me to type than to bring paper and a pencil to write something down.

Problems: duplicated 'I', incorrect verb 'wear' for carrying a phone, wrong pronoun 'them' for typing, and awkward gerund phrase order. Use 'carry' for a phone, compare actions with 'than', and place 'something down' at the end. Suggestions: avoid repetition, choose correct verbs for actions, and keep comparison parallel.

× Are actually, I never, uh, keep Diaries because, uh, I'm lazy person and I, I cannot continue writing every day, but instead of it, I often take pictures so I can recall my memories by.

✓ Actually, I never keep a diary because I'm a lazy person and I can't continue writing every day; instead, I often take pictures so I can recall my memories.

Errors: 'Are actually' is wrong word, 'Diaries' should be singular 'a diary' when referring to the habit, missing article before 'lazy person', and awkward ending 'recall my memories by.' Use contractions appropriately ('can't'), and 'instead' as a transition. Suggestions: use correct articles ('a diary', 'a lazy person'), choose singular/plural according to meaning, and complete the clause ('recall my memories').

× I often, uh, record my life by taking picture and uh. Taking notes and scheduling precisely on Google Calendar like that.

✓ I often record my life by taking pictures, taking notes, and scheduling things precisely on Google Calendar.

Errors include singular 'picture' instead of plural 'pictures', unnecessary period and filler words, and inconsistent list punctuation. Use parallel gerund forms ('taking pictures', 'taking notes') and include an object for 'scheduling' ('things' or 'events'). Suggestions: keep list items parallel, use plural nouns when appropriate, and remove fillers.