Writing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, I write quite a lot because literature is one of my major subjects, and I have six lessons per week. Additionally, I run a Rivet account on Instagram where I share my thoughts about life and promote awareness of mental health.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms and clearer linking words. Also, avoid vague terms like 'repair' and explain your points more specifically.

Ejemplo: I enjoy writing about movies because I have always dreamed of becoming a scriptwriter. Writing film analyses helps me practice my skills and improve my critical thinking. Furthermore, it enhances my emotional intelligence and creativity.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct sentence structures. Also, clarify your points with specific examples and avoid vague phrases like 'mood sample'.

Ejemplo: I might change my writing topics if my career plans change. For example, if I become a teacher or an astronaut, I may write about physics or mathematics. However, I believe I will continue focusing on movies and mental health because they interest me deeply.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use correct vocabulary ('take notes', 'write posts') and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, explain your preferences clearly and coherently.

Ejemplo: It depends on the situation. I usually type when taking notes during lectures or writing posts online. However, for personal topics like movies and mental health, I prefer handwriting in a journal because I enjoy the tactile experience.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct tenses. Also, avoid redundancy and explain your diary habits more specifically.

Ejemplo: I haven't kept a diary for a long time. The last time I wrote regularly was during seventh grade. Back then, I would write in my diary every day to reflect on my experiences and remind myself of my goals.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use correct plural forms and avoid filler words. Also, complete your sentences and provide specific examples.

Ejemplo: Besides writing, I like to take photos and videos of special moments with my friends and family. I also keep sentimental objects like money or gifts as mementos to remember those times.

× Moreover, I also owned an Rivet account on Instagram to share my ideas about life and promote their understanding of mental inner world.

✓ Moreover, I also own a Rivet account on Instagram to share my ideas about life and promote understanding of the mental inner world.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'owned' (past tense) instead of 'own' (present tense) because the student currently has the account. Also, 'an' should be 'a' before 'Rivet' because 'R' is pronounced with a consonant sound. 'Their' is incorrect as it does not refer to a clear antecedent; 'understanding' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the mental inner world.

× I've always harboured a dream of being a scriptwriter one day, so writing about films and analyzing as well as criticize it helped me to practicing and repair.

✓ I've always harboured a dream of being a scriptwriter one day, so writing about films and analyzing as well as criticizing them helps me to practice and improve.

The sentence mixes verb forms incorrectly: 'criticize' should be 'criticizing' to match 'analyzing' in parallel structure. 'Helped me to practicing and repair' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me to practice and improve' to maintain present tense and correct verb forms. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'films' (plural).

× Moreover, I also found out that it helps me to cultivate my IQ, EQ and even my critical thinking.

✓ Moreover, I also found out that it helps me to cultivate my IQ, EQ, and even my critical thinking skills.

Adding 'skills' after 'critical thinking' clarifies the meaning. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list for clarity.

× Well, maybe I might have a change of my heart about my future career.

✓ Well, maybe I might change my mind about my future career.

'Have a change of my heart' is an incorrect idiomatic expression. The correct phrase is 'change my mind.' Also, 'might' already expresses possibility, so 'maybe' is redundant but acceptable.

× Maybe in the future I will be a teacher or an astronaut.

✓ Maybe in the future, I will be a teacher or an astronaut.

A comma after 'future' improves readability. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× So the things I may relate might about physical mathematics exercises or analysis, about mood sample.

✓ So the things I may write about might be physical mathematics exercises or analysis, or about mood samples.

'Relate might about' is incorrect; 'write about' fits the context. 'Mood sample' should be plural 'mood samples' to match the plural context.

× But I believe that I will to make a point to focus on movies and mental.

✓ But I believe that I will make a point to focus on movies and mental health.

'Will to make' is incorrect; the correct form is 'will make.' Also, 'mental' is incomplete; it should be 'mental health' for clarity.

× When it comes to taking note in lecture or writing post, I usually turn to typing.

✓ When it comes to taking notes in lectures or writing posts, I usually turn to typing.

'Note' should be plural 'notes' because it refers to multiple items. 'Lecture' should be plural 'lectures' to generalize. 'Writing post' should be 'writing posts' for plural consistency.

× But when it comes to uh writing about some errant topics such as movies and mental health, I always try my best to trade it down on journal.

✓ But when it comes to writing about some errant topics such as movies and mental health, I always try my best to write them down in a journal.

'Trade it down' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'write them down.' 'On journal' should be 'in a journal.' 'Errant' is likely a misused word; possibly 'errant' was intended as 'different' or 'various,' but correction focuses on grammar.

× I like the physical experience of having a journal with vividly UH.

✓ I like the physical experience of having a journal with vivid entries.

'Vividly' is an adverb and cannot modify 'journal'; 'vivid' (adjective) is correct. 'UH' is filler and omitted.

× Oh, it has been a really long time since the last time I wrote diary.

✓ Oh, it has been a really long time since the last time I wrote in my diary.

'Wrote diary' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'wrote in my diary' to indicate the action of writing entries.

× As far as I remember it was the 7th grade whole for the whole 7th grade.

✓ As far as I remember, it was during the whole 7th grade year.

The original sentence is unclear and awkward. '7th grade whole for the whole 7th grade' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× I always drop down on my Diaries after my day as to appreciate everything that I've gone through and remind me did me about my goals.

✓ I always write in my diary after my day to appreciate everything that I've gone through and remind myself about my goals.

'Drop down on my Diaries' is incorrect; 'write in my diary' is correct. 'Remind me did me' is incorrect; 'remind myself' is correct. 'Diaries' should be singular 'diary'.

× Besides writing, I also make it a point to take snaps of good memories with my friends or my family members.

✓ Besides writing, I also make it a point to take snaps of good memories with my friends and my family members.

Using 'or' suggests exclusivity; 'and' is more appropriate to include both groups.

× Moreover, I can also take a video of them umm.

✓ Moreover, I can also take videos of them.

'Take a video' is singular; 'videos' plural is more natural when referring to multiple occasions. 'Umm' is filler and omitted.

× Another ways is to keep their sentimental objects such as money, those or gifts.

✓ Another way is to keep sentimental objects such as money, notes, or gifts.

'Another ways' is incorrect; 'Another way' is singular. 'Those' is unclear; likely intended 'notes.' 'Their' is unnecessary and confusing.

× I usually keep it in uh.

✓ I usually keep them in a safe place.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'It' is ambiguous; 'them' refers to sentimental objects. Added 'in a safe place' to complete the thought.