Writing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用简洁的语言说明原因。

Ejemplo: Yes, I write a lot these days because I am preparing for a writing test. I practice by writing long essays to improve my ability to express my opinions clearly.

Sugerencia: 回答中有重复和犹豫词，建议使用更自然流畅的表达，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

Ejemplo: I like to write about current issues and challenges in the world. By expressing my opinions and suggesting solutions, I can better understand these topics.

Sugerencia: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议直接回答问题并用具体理由支持，避免重复和犹豫词。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think what I write will change because the issues I write about are current and may evolve. People will try to solve these challenges in the future.

Sugerencia: 回答表达较为清楚，但有重复和犹豫词，建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达方式。

Ejemplo: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient. I can easily delete or correct mistakes compared to handwriting.

Sugerencia: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议用简洁的句子直接表达不喜欢写日记的原因，避免重复和犹豫词。

Ejemplo: I don't often keep diaries because I feel awkward writing about my daily life. Also, I would be embarrassed if my parents read them.

Sugerencia: 回答内容较丰富，但表达不够流畅，建议使用更自然的句子结构，避免重复和犹豫词。

Ejemplo: Sometimes I share photos on social media like WeChat to let my friends and family know how I am doing. This helps them not to worry about me.

× Yes, they really write a lot a lot presently because due to I need to complete an.

✓ Yes, I really write a lot presently because I need to complete an.

这里主语是第一人称单数，应该用'I'而不是'they'，这是代词使用错误（12）。另外，句子中存在多余的'a lot'，应删除重复部分。

× I use writing test, so I need to practice a lot by writing the large essay for providing more informative opinions and also I need to like try a lot of.

✓ I am preparing for a writing test, so I need to practice a lot by writing large essays to provide more informative opinions, and I also need to try a lot.

句子结构混乱，缺少主谓一致和完整表达，需调整句子结构使其通顺。

× sometimes I write something about the current situation and also some challenges facing to today's world.

✓ Sometimes I write about the current situation and some challenges facing today's world.

动词'face'后不需要介词'to'，这是介词使用错误（11）。

× And also I will try to write some my opinion and also some, umm, some other solution about this kind of daily, umm, challenge so which can also improve, uh, my understanding about this topic.

✓ I will also try to write some of my opinions and some other solutions about these daily challenges, which can improve my understanding of this topic.

'some my opinion'应为'some of my opinions'，代词和名词搭配错误（12）。

× I will say yes because the things I was writing was about some essay umm happened currently.

✓ I would say yes because the things I am writing are about some essays happening currently.

时态使用错误，描述现在正在写的内容应使用现在时（6）。

× So umm this kind of issues, many people are also known about it.

✓ So, these kinds of issues are also known by many people.

'this kind of issues'应为'these kinds of issues'，单复数搭配错误（1）。

× So I will think umm people will try their best to overcome this challenges in the future.

✓ I think people will try their best to overcome these challenges in the future.

'this challenges'应为'these challenges'，单复数搭配错误（1）。

× So I prefer typing because when sometimes I need to click on delete something, I only need to click umm click and also press the button to umm change it into the correct way.

✓ I prefer typing because sometimes when I need to delete something, I only need to click and press a button to change it correctly.

'click on delete something'表达不自然，应为'delete something'，介词使用错误（11）。

× So which is really convenient and fast way for me to umm ride compared with the writing in hand.

✓ This is a really convenient and fast way for me to write compared with handwriting.

'fast way'前缺少冠词，且'ride'应为'write'，形容词和动词使用错误（13）。

× So I'm not a person really like to write Diaries because I was a little bit feel awkward about the things I would happen in my daily life and writing out that and I and whenever I will read that, I will really feel embarrassed and I really afraid to, umm, let my parents to know about the things I have read, right.

✓ I'm not a person who really likes to write diaries because I feel a little awkward about the things that happen in my daily life and writing them down. Whenever I read them, I feel embarrassed and afraid to let my parents know about what I have written.

代词使用不当，时态混乱，句子结构错误，需调整代词和时态（12，5，26）。

× So sometimes I would like sharing the social media like taking some photos and also up upload it into the WeChat to let my friends also my parents to know about my current situations and also can tell them that I was really well in this day so they will not be umm or worry about me.

✓ Sometimes I like sharing on social media by taking photos and uploading them to WeChat to let my friends and my parents know about my current situation and to tell them that I am doing well today so they will not worry about me.

介词使用错误，如'sharing the social media'应为'sharing on social media'，'up upload'重复，时态和句子结构需调整（11，5，26）。