Part 1
Examinador
Do you write a lot?
Candidato
Not a lot, but sometimes I also write something like lyrics or some little articles.
Examinador
What do you like to write? Why?
Candidato
Yeah, I like to write because I think, right, It's a nice way to impress yourself and to release your emotion. You can write the things you can speak to others and that will make you happy.
Examinador
Do you think the things you write would change?
Candidato
Yes, because of the surroundings, the things you write could be change. For example, when I was a young boy I like to write some fiction, but now I am more likely to write lyrics.
Examinador
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Candidato
I prefer typing because I can write in on my phone anywhere, anytime it's convenient rather than handling.
Examinador
How often do you keep diaries?
Candidato
Not too far, maybe every month or every season. I don't have a hobby to write Diaries. I I think it's useful for me.
Examinador
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Candidato
I will record my life by taking photos and taking videos and. Show my moments in WeChat.
Do you write a lot?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 回答较为简短且表达不够自然,建议使用更地道的表达方式,并避免重复。
Ejemplo: I don't write very often, but occasionally I compose lyrics or short articles.
What do you like to write? Why?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 回答中有语法和表达不自然的问题,建议简化句子结构,避免口语填充词,表达更清晰。
Ejemplo: I enjoy writing because it helps me express my emotions and makes me feel happy.
Do you think the things you write would change?
Puntuación: 75.0Sugerencia: 回答内容较好,但语法错误影响表达,建议注意时态和单复数的正确使用。
Ejemplo: Yes, my writing has changed over time. When I was younger, I liked writing fiction, but now I prefer writing lyrics.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误,表达不够清晰,建议注意单词拼写和句子结构。
Ejemplo: I prefer typing because I can write on my phone anytime and anywhere, which is more convenient than handwriting.
How often do you keep diaries?
Puntuación: 55.0Sugerencia: 回答不够连贯且表达不清晰,建议使用更自然的表达方式,并注意句子连贯性。
Ejemplo: I don't keep a diary regularly, maybe once a month or every few months. Although it's not my hobby, I find it useful.
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 回答中断句不完整,建议使用连贯的句子并丰富细节。
Ejemplo: I record my life by taking photos and videos, and I often share these moments on WeChat.
× Not a lot, but sometimes I also write something like lyrics or some little articles.
✓ Not a lot, but sometimes I also write things like lyrics or some little articles.
这里'something'用于不可数或单数名词,'lyrics'和'articles'是复数,应该用复数指示词'things'。
× Yeah, I like to write because I think, right, It's a nice way to impress yourself and to release your emotion.
✓ Yeah, I like to write because I think, right, it's a nice way to impress yourself and to release your emotions.
emotion应使用复数emotions,因为情感通常是复数形式。
× You can write the things you can speak to others and that will make you happy.
✓ You can write the things you can speak about to others and that will make you happy.
动词speak后通常需要介词about来引出内容,缺少介词导致表达不完整。
× Yes, because of the surroundings, the things you write could be change.
✓ Yes, because of the surroundings, the things you write could change.
modal verb 'could'后应接动词原形,不能用被动形式'be change'。
× For example, when I was a young boy I like to write some fiction, but now I am more likely to write lyrics.
✓ For example, when I was a young boy I liked to write some fiction, but now I am more likely to write lyrics.
描述过去的动作应使用过去时,like应改为liked。
× I prefer typing because I can write in on my phone anywhere, anytime it's convenient rather than handling.
✓ I prefer typing because I can write on my phone anywhere, anytime; it's more convenient than handwriting.
'write in on'中'in'多余,应去掉;'handling'应为'handwriting',表示手写。
× Not too far, maybe every month or every season. I don't have a hobby to write Diaries.
✓ Not too often, maybe every month or every season. I don't have a hobby of writing diaries.
'Not too far'用词不当,应为'Not too often'表示频率;'hobby to write Diaries'表达不自然,应改为'hobby of writing diaries'。
× I will record my life by taking photos and taking videos and. Show my moments in WeChat.
✓ I will record my life by taking photos and videos and show my moments on WeChat.
'Show'前不应有句号;'in WeChat'应改为'on WeChat',表示在某个平台上。