Writing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Also, use more natural phrasing and avoid redundancy, for example, 'I used to write journals to record my feelings, ideas, and daily events, but now I rarely write because I use my phone instead.'

Ejemplo: I used to keep journals to record my feelings, ideas, and daily events. However, since I started using my phone more often, I rarely write by hand anymore.

Sugerencia: Your answer repeats 'ideas' and is slightly unclear. Try to avoid repetition and be more specific. Use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

Ejemplo: I enjoy writing because it allows me to express my thoughts freely. Therefore, I usually jot down my feelings at the moment and record important events from my day.

Sugerencia: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific examples. Also, use correct tense and linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe my writing changes over time. As I gain more experience and knowledge, my style and ideas evolve. For example, when I was younger, I used simpler words, but now I try to use more varied vocabulary.

Sugerencia: Good answer with clear reasons and contrast. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance coherence.

Ejemplo: It depends on the situation. When I'm in a meeting, I prefer typing on a computer because it's convenient for quickly noting ideas and minutes. However, if I want to express my feelings or thoughts more personally, I prefer handwriting since it feels warmer and more intimate.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Clarify your meaning and use correct tense. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific.

Ejemplo: I find it hard to keep a diary regularly because of my busy work schedule. However, when I was younger, I used to write in my diary every day.

Sugerencia: Your answer is incomplete and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to complete your sentences and use more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and be specific.

Ejemplo: I like to take photos of memorable moments to capture them. Then, I share these photos on Instagram, which is a social media platform for sharing daily life and happy moments with others.

× I used to write journals to record my feelings, ideas and the events happened that day.

✓ I used to write journals to record my feelings, ideas and the events that happened that day.

The phrase 'the events happened that day' is incorrect because 'happened' needs a relative pronoun 'that' to connect it properly to 'events'. The correct form is 'the events that happened that day'. This is a common past tense relative clause structure.

× However, when I have a phone, I seldom write on my own. I.

✓ However, since I have a phone, I seldom write on my own.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'When I have a phone' is not the best expression here; 'since I have a phone' better explains the reason. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'I.' which is incomplete. The corrected sentence completes the thought properly.

× Writing is a way to convey your ideas and express your ideas freely, so I prefer jotting down my feelings on that at that moment and to record the important things of the day.

✓ Writing is a way to convey your ideas and express them freely, so I prefer jotting down my feelings at that moment and recording the important things of the day.

The phrase 'jotting down my feelings on that at that moment and to record' mixes verb forms incorrectly. After 'prefer', gerunds should be used consistently. Also, 'express your ideas freely' is repeated unnecessarily; 'express them freely' is clearer. 'On that' is incorrect preposition usage; 'at that moment' is correct.

× For example, when I was younger I tend to write simpler words, but now I would tend to write.

✓ For example, when I was younger I tended to write simpler words, but now I tend to write more complex ones.

The verb 'tend' should be in past tense 'tended' to match 'when I was younger'. Also, the sentence is incomplete after 'now I would tend to write'; it needs completion to clarify what is written now. The correction completes the thought and matches tenses properly.

× If I am in a meeting, I prefer typing on the computer because it is very convenient to jot down the ideas and minutes quickly.

✓ If I am in a meeting, I prefer typing on the computer because it is very convenient to jot down ideas and minutes quickly.

The phrase 'the ideas' is unnecessarily definite; 'ideas' without 'the' is more natural here. Also, 'typing on the computer' is acceptable but could be improved to 'typing on a computer' or 'typing on my computer' for clarity, but this is stylistic rather than grammatical.

× If I want to express my feelings or thoughts freely, I prefer handwriting because it is very warm.

✓ If I want to express my feelings or thoughts freely, I prefer handwriting because it feels very warm.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'handwriting' which is an action, so 'feels' is better than 'is' to describe the sensation or feeling. 'It is very warm' is less natural than 'it feels very warm' in this context.

× I can really maintain my habit of writing a diary because of my busy work.

✓ I cannot really maintain my habit of writing a diary because of my busy work.

The original sentence contradicts itself; 'can really maintain' suggests ability, but the context implies difficulty. The correct modal verb is 'cannot' to express inability due to busy work.

× However, when I was younger, I would like to refresh my Diaries every day.

✓ However, when I was younger, I would like to refresh my diaries every day.

'Would like' is used for polite requests or desires in the present; for past habitual actions, 'used to' or 'would' alone is better. Also, 'refresh my diaries' is unclear; likely intended 'write in my diaries' or 'update my diaries'. Capitalisation of 'Diaries' is incorrect; it should be lowercase.

× Personally, I would like to take a photo of the memorable moments to capture it down and to share a post on the Instagram which is a social media platform for sharing your daily life and happiness happy moment with others.

✓ Personally, I like to take photos of memorable moments to capture them and share posts on Instagram, which is a social media platform for sharing your daily life and happy moments with others.

'Capture it down' is incorrect; 'capture them' is correct as 'moments' is plural. 'Share a post on the Instagram' should be 'share posts on Instagram' without 'the'. 'Happiness happy moment' is redundant; 'happy moments' is correct. Also, 'would like to' is better as 'like to' for habitual actions.