Hometown— Part 1 Informe
Conversación
Part 1
Examinador
Where is your hometown?
Candidato
My hometown is Ilsan, which is a satellite city of Seoul. In fact, it is quite well known for its adorable cat mascots which represent local culture. Moreover, interestingly, there are many small shops that sells products related to that.
Examinador
What do you like about your home town?
Candidato
What I appreciate about my hometown is that we have a Big Lake. This means there are a lot of parks and green spaces nearby where I can enjoy a picnic. Additionally, there is a stunning summer festival which attracts many tourists.
Examinador
How long have you lived there?
Candidato
I have lived here for 15 years, during which I completed all my education in this town. So basically I have a lot of friends nearby and I can say that I know this place like the back of my hand, including community events or hidden spots.
Examinador
Is your home town a good place for young people?
Candidato
Yes, I think it's a perfect place for young people because we offer a lot of job opportunities that they can build their careers. Also, there are a lot of trendy restaurants and cinemas that they can enjoy and socialize with their friends.
Evaluación
Total
Part 1
Where is your hometown?
Puntuación: 85.0Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'which'와 'that'의 사용에 주의하고, 문장 길이를 조금 줄여 더 간결하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 'sells'는 복수형 주어에 맞게 'sell'로 수정해야 합니다.
Ejemplo: My hometown is Ilsan, a satellite city of Seoul. It is famous for its adorable cat mascots that represent local culture. Also, many small shops sell related products.
What do you like about your home town?
Puntuación: 90.0Sugerencia: 답변이 명확하고 구체적이지만, 'Big Lake'와 같은 고유명사는 소문자로 시작하고, 'which' 대신 'that'을 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 그리고 연결어 사용이 적절하여 문장이 잘 연결되어 있습니다.
Ejemplo: I like that my hometown has a big lake, which means many parks and green spaces nearby for picnics. Also, there is a stunning summer festival that attracts many tourists.
How long have you lived there?
Puntuación: 92.0Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적이며, 연결어 사용도 적절합니다. 다만, 'So basically'는 구어체 표현으로, 시험에서는 'Therefore'나 'As a result' 같은 표현으로 바꾸는 것이 더 좋습니다.
Ejemplo: I have lived here for 15 years, during which I completed all my education. Therefore, I have many friends nearby and know this place like the back of my hand, including community events and hidden spots.
Is your home town a good place for young people?
Puntuación: 88.0Sugerencia: 답변이 명확하지만, 'we offer' 대신 'it offers'로 주어를 명확히 하고, 'that they can build their careers'는 'to build their careers'로 수정하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다.
Ejemplo: Yes, I think it is a perfect place for young people because it offers many job opportunities to build their careers. Also, there are trendy restaurants and cinemas where they can enjoy and socialize with friends.
Gramática
× there are many small shops that sells products related to that.
✓ there are many small shops that sell products related to that.
The verb 'sell' should agree with the plural subject 'shops'. Since 'shops' is plural, the base form 'sell' is used instead of 'sells'. '많은 작은 가게들'이 주어이므로 동사도 복수형인 'sell'을 사용해야 합니다.
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