Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer has some confusion because Chicago is not in Rangpur division. Also, avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'two most beautiful scenarios'. Try to be more precise and natural in your description. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: My hometown is Rangpur, a city in Bangladesh known for its beautiful scenery and peaceful environment. For instance, the city has a lovely river that flows nearby, adding to its charm.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. You start by saying you don't like winter food but then mention a delicious food. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, check grammar and vocabulary for accuracy.

Ejemplo: I like the traditional foods in my hometown, especially a dish called Baba Pita. It is made from mixed flour and molasses, and people usually prepare it fresh in the morning during winter.

Sugerencia: Your answer is a bit unclear and contradictory about the total years. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain with clear linking words. Avoid filler words like 'umm' to sound more confident.

Ejemplo: I have lived in my hometown for about 10 years. I was born there, but after my mother passed away, I moved to my sister's house, so I have spent almost 13 years in total living there.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good content but needs better structure and grammar. Use linking words like 'however' and avoid filler words. Make your sentences clear and concise to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: Currently, I think my hometown is not a good place for young people. However, when I was growing up, it was excellent because the education system was strong, and many brilliant students competed academically.

× There are two most beautiful scenarios over there.

✓ There are two most beautiful scenes over there.

The word 'scenarios' is incorrect in this context; 'scenes' is the correct noun to describe views or landscapes. This is a vocabulary choice issue but related to the use of 'there be' structure to indicate existence, which is correct here.

× For example, there is a river where the water flows from.

✓ For example, there is a river from which the water flows.

Ending a sentence with a preposition like 'from' is generally considered incorrect in formal English. The preposition should precede its object, so 'from which' is the correct form.

× the people of my hometown works around in the morning and makes a delicious foods

✓ the people of my hometown work around in the morning and make delicious food

'People' is plural, so the verbs should be 'work' and 'make' instead of 'works' and 'makes'. Also, 'foods' is incorrect here; 'food' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× makes a delicious foods

✓ makes delicious food

'Food' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a' or pluralized as 'foods'. The correct form is 'delicious food'.

× especially Baba pita we call it and it is made of mixed flowers and molasses in it.

✓ especially Baba pita, as we call it, and it is made of mixed flour and molasses.

The phrase 'we call it' should be set off by commas for clarity. Also, 'flowers' is incorrect; the correct word is 'flour' when referring to the ingredient. The pronoun 'it' is correctly used but the sentence structure needs commas for clarity.

× I think I lived here in total 10 years because I was born there and after my mom died I left my hometown and came to my sister's house.

✓ I think I have lived here for a total of 10 years because I was born there, and after my mom died, I left my hometown and came to my sister's house.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to express the duration up to now. Also, 'for a total of' is the correct phrase to express duration. Commas are added for clarity.

× The education system was there is really good.

✓ The education system there is really good.

The sentence incorrectly mixes past and present tense. Since the student is referring to the time when they were born and raised, past tense 'was' is appropriate, but the phrase 'was there is' is incorrect. It should be either 'was really good' or 'there is really good'. Context suggests past tense: 'The education system there was really good.'

× in our hometown there are so many brilliant students are there and the competition among the students is really good.

✓ In our hometown, there are so many brilliant students, and the competition among the students is really good.

The sentence has redundant 'are there' and lacks proper punctuation. Removing the second 'are there' and adding commas improves clarity and sentence structure.