Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to make your answer more natural and complete by adding a bit more detail about your hometown and avoiding awkward phrasing. For example, instead of "a very culturally rich society and loving people," you could say "which is known for its rich culture and friendly people."

Ejemplo: I come from Amman, Jordan, which is known for its rich culture and friendly people. It's a vibrant city with a mix of modern and traditional influences.

Sugerencia: Your answer is quite natural and detailed, but try to avoid filler phrases like "you know" and make your sentences more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: What I love most about Amman is that during my childhood, we only visited during summer holidays, so I always looked forward to returning. Additionally, I enjoy spending time with my family during our gatherings and exploring the city's streets.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some repetition and unclear parts. Try to organize your answer clearly, avoid repeating phrases, and specify the city name instead of leaving it blank. Also, keep sentences concise and coherent.

Ejemplo: I have been living in Amman for four years now. I returned to Jordan to pursue my bachelor's degree in pharmacy at Hashemite University, which is located in Zarqa, another important city in Jordan.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some unclear phrases and lacks coherence. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid vague expressions like "support loving."

Ejemplo: I believe Amman is a great place for young people because it offers many opportunities. For example, there is the Sports City for those interested in athletics. Moreover, history lovers can visit landmarks like the Amman Citadel downtown, and music enthusiasts have access to various concerts and events.

× I come from Amman, Jordan, a very culturally rich society and loving people.

✓ I come from Amman, Jordan, a city with a very rich culture and loving people.

The phrase 'a very culturally rich society' is awkward because 'society' is a broad term and 'culturally rich' is an adjective phrase that doesn't fit well here. It's clearer to say 'a city with a very rich culture' to describe Amman. Also, 'loving people' is fine but better connected this way.

× What I love the most about it is the fact that back when we were kids, we would only come here on summer holidays, so I get to miss the place before I get to see it again.

✓ What I love the most about it is the fact that back when we were kids, we would only come here on summer holidays, so I got to miss the place before I got to see it again.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action refers to past events ('back when we were kids'), the verbs should be in past tense ('got' instead of 'get').

× I love seeing my family and the gatherings that we have in here, as well as, you know, walking around the city.

✓ I love seeing my family and the gatherings that we have here, as well as, you know, walking around the city.

The preposition 'in' before 'here' is unnecessary and incorrect. 'Here' already indicates location, so 'in here' is redundant.

× So I've been living here for four years now.

✓ So I've been living there for four years now.

Since the question is about the hometown and the student is presumably not currently in the hometown, 'there' is more appropriate than 'here' to refer to the hometown.

× I came back to pursue my bachelor degree in pharmacy at the Hazmat University, which is one of the very one of the most important and most leading universities here in Jordan.

✓ I came back to pursue my bachelor's degree in pharmacy at Hazmat University, which is one of the most important and leading universities here in Jordan.

The phrase 'bachelor degree' should be 'bachelor's degree' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'the Hazmat University' is incorrect if the university's name is 'Hazmat University' without 'the'. The phrase 'very one of the most' is redundant; 'one of the most' suffices.

× However, it is not in Amman, it is in which is still a very important city here in Jordan.

✓ However, it is not in Amman; it is in another city, which is still very important here in Jordan.

The original sentence is incomplete and confusing. It lacks the name of the city and proper punctuation. Adding 'another city' and a semicolon improves clarity and sentence structure.

× I do believe so. We have so many opportunities here for young people to pursue, for support loving, we have the Sport City and Amman.

✓ I do believe so. We have so many opportunities here for young people to pursue. For sports lovers, we have the Sports City in Amman.

The phrase 'for support loving' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'for sports lovers'. Also, 'Sport City' should be 'Sports City'. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× For people who love cultures and histories, we have so many historical places such as the castle that is located in downtown and for music lovers there are so many there.

✓ For people who love culture and history, we have many historical places such as the castle located downtown, and for music lovers, there are many options as well.

'Cultures and histories' should be singular 'culture and history' when speaking generally. 'In downtown' should be 'located downtown'. The sentence was also a run-on and needed better punctuation and structure.