Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 文法の誤り（"is in is situated"）を修正し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、"quiet place"の前に冠詞を入れ、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

Ejemplo: My hometown is Nish Tokyo City, located in the western part of Tokyo. It is a very quiet place where I can enjoy a peaceful life.

Sugerencia: "large, big, large"のような重複表現を避け、語彙を整理しましょう。また、"at Public Library"の前に冠詞を入れ、文の流れをスムーズにするために接続詞を使うと良いです。

Ejemplo: I like the environment and atmosphere, especially because there is a large park and a public library where we can spend peaceful time.

Sugerencia: 文法ミス（"have had lived"や"I back I back"）を修正し、意味が明確になるようにしましょう。過去形と現在完了形の使い分けに注意し、簡潔に答えることが重要です。

Ejemplo: I've lived here for almost 27 years. Actually, I lived alone in central Tokyo for about 2 years, but then I returned to my hometown.

Sugerencia: "few amusement facility"は複数形の"facilities"に直し、"can't interest in"は"aren't interested in"など正しい表現に直しましょう。また、理由をもう少し具体的に述べると良いです。

Ejemplo: I don't think so because there are few amusement facilities, so young people aren't interested in living there due to the lack of entertainment options.

× My hometown is in is situated in the West part of Tokyo and is called Nish Tokyo City.

✓ My hometown is situated in the western part of Tokyo and is called Nish Tokyo City.

The phrase 'is in is situated' is redundant and incorrect. Use either 'is in' or 'is situated in'. Also, 'West part' should be 'western part' to correctly use the adjective form.

× It is very quiet place so I can spend peaceful life there.

✓ It is a very quiet place, so I can spend a peaceful life there.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very quiet place' and 'peaceful life'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× I like the environment and atmosphere, especially it has a large, big, large park and at Public Library we we can spend peaceful time.

✓ I like the environment and atmosphere, especially because it has a big park, and at the Public Library we can spend peaceful time.

The phrase 'large, big, large park' is repetitive and incorrect; choose one adjective. Also, 'at Public Library' needs the definite article 'the'. The repeated word 'we' is a typo and should be removed.

× I've lived here almost 27 years.

✓ I've lived here for almost 27 years.

The preposition 'for' is needed to indicate the duration of time in the present perfect tense.

× Actually, I have had lived a center of Tokyo for almost 2 years by myself, but I back I back.

✓ Actually, I lived in the center of Tokyo for almost 2 years by myself, but I came back.

The phrase 'have had lived' is incorrect; use simple past 'lived' for a completed action. Also, 'a center' should be 'the center' as it is a specific place. The phrase 'I back I back' is incorrect; it should be 'I came back'.

× I don't think so because there are few amusement facility so they can't interest in something to do there.

✓ I don't think so because there are few amusement facilities, so they can't be interested in anything to do there.

The noun 'facility' should be plural 'facilities' to agree with 'few'. Also, 'can't interest in' is incorrect; it should be 'can't be interested in'. 'Something to do' is better expressed as 'anything to do' in this context.