Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and correct prepositions and word forms (e.g., "staying in Malaysia" → "studying in Malaysia"). Use linking words if needed.

Ejemplo: I am a student studying in Malaysia for my higher education. I am studying Supply Chain Management at UCMA, an international university, and I plan to focus on logistics and procurement in my future career.

Sugerencia: Answer directly using correct tense and clear location names. Provide one brief supporting detail about the job. Avoid hesitation and fragmented sentences.

Ejemplo: I work part-time at an apartment complex called Blackbeard on Jalan Mai. I started a few months ago and my role involves helping with guest services and maintenance tasks.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct vocabulary (e.g., "tourist area" instead of "tourism place"). Avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work because it is located in a busy tourist area on Jalan Imbiah. As a result, I meet many different customers and have learned useful skills in customer service and problem-solving.

Sugerencia: Affirm your opinion and give specific examples of what you learn. Replace vague phrases with concrete details and use linking words for coherence. Remove repeated words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like working there because it is a popular tourist spot where many visitors from different countries come. For example, I have improved my English speaking and learned how to handle diverse customer requests and complaints.

Sugerencia: State your future plans clearly with correct verb forms and one or two specific details about the plan. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "I'm the seal restaurant"). Use linking words to show purpose or intention.

Ejemplo: In the future I want to open my own bakery and café where I will sell cakes and pastries. My plan is to study pastry techniques while working and then start a small, cozy bakery that also offers coffee and desserts.

× I'm a student UH, I'm a staying Malaysia uh for my higher studies.

✓ I'm a student. I'm staying in Malaysia for my higher studies.

The original uses 'a staying' which is ungrammatical. The sentence needs present continuous 'I'm staying' and the preposition 'in' before the country. Use a period to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I'm staying in Malaysia' for ongoing action.

× My course is Supply chain management at University of my international UCMA.

✓ My course is Supply Chain Management at the International University UCMA.

The phrase 'University of my international UCMA' is incorrect word order and missing articles/capitalization. Use 'the International University UCMA' or the university's proper name. Also capitalize the course name. Suggestion: 'My course is Supply Chain Management at the International University UCMA.'

× A few months ago, uh, I work part time, uh, at Jalan Mai, uh. Apartment Blackbeard.

✓ A few months ago, I worked part-time at Jalan Mai, Apartment Blackbeard.

Time expression 'A few months ago' requires past tense 'worked' not present 'work'. Also use hyphen in 'part-time' and combine location phrases. Suggestion: use past simple after past time markers.

× Yes, uh, for I work, I work in, uh, bank business on Jalan Imbiah.

✓ Yes, when I worked, I worked in banking on Jalan Imbiah.

The speaker mixes present and past. Context indicates past employment, so use past tense 'worked' and the noun 'banking' rather than 'bank business'. 'When I worked' clarifies time. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense matching context.

× This is good place, this is tourism place.

✓ It is a good place; it is a tourist area.

'Tourism place' is incorrect; use 'tourist area' or 'tourist place'. Also need indefinite article 'a' before 'good place'. Suggestion: use 'It is a good place' and 'tourist area' for natural expression.

× So I think I learn to, uh, various everything.

✓ So I think I learned many different things.

The original 'learn to, various everything' is ungrammatical. Use past/simple form 'learned' if referring to experience, and 'many different things' to convey variety. Suggestion: 'I learned many different things' or 'I have learned many different things.'

× Yes, I like the place where I work because this this place, tourism place every many, many people come, come in there from many countries.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it is a tourist area and many people come there from different countries.

Redundant words 'this this', wrong noun phrase 'tourism place', incorrect word order 'every many, many people come, come in there'. Use 'it is a tourist area' and 'many people come there from different countries'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× So I think I have learned a lot of about customer service and communication.

✓ So I think I have learned a lot about customer service and communication.

The phrase 'a lot of about' is incorrect; remove 'of' after 'a lot'. Present perfect 'have learned' is appropriate. Suggestion: 'have learned a lot about' is correct collocation.

× What are your future work plans? Actually, I'm a Baker, uh, I make cake, uh, I baking cake and pastry also. So that's why my future works plan is I, I have an own restaurant.

✓ Actually, I'm a baker. I make cakes and pastries, and I bake as well. That's why my future career plan is to have my own restaurant.

Multiple errors: 'Baker' should be lowercase; use plural 'cakes' and 'pastries' or uncountable forms; 'I baking' is wrong form; 'my future works plan' and 'I have an own restaurant' are incorrect—use 'future career plan' and 'to have my own restaurant'. Use infinitive 'to have' to express future intention. Suggestion: keep consistent noun forms and correct verb forms.

× I'm the seal restaurant. So yeah.

✓ I want to run my own restaurant, a small restaurant perhaps.

'I'm the seal restaurant' is unclear and uses wrong articles/words. Likely intended 'I will own a small restaurant' or 'I will run my own restaurant'. Suggest rephrasing to 'run my own restaurant' or 'have my own restaurant' and add adjective 'small' if meant 'seal'->'small'.