Part 1
Examinador
Do you work or are you a student?
Candidato
Now I am working as a plan and policy analyst in the office of National Security Council in Thailand. My responsibility is the collecting some informations and analyse some public policy in Thailand and foreigner.
Examinador
Where do you work?>
Candidato
I work in Bangkok at Government House, where the crucial place for welcoming some foreigner or special guests from abroad, and then I work at the same place as a Prime Minister of Thailand.
Examinador
Is it a good place to work?
Candidato
Of course, my place desert so have a historical history and it is a symbol symbol of a Government House and then I think that it just a outstanding.
Examinador
Would you like the place where you work?
Candidato
Was because of this place, this place or so as an, uh, important Government House and I feel very pasty guess because of history and impressive architecture, including the work atmosphere inspired me.
Examinador
What are your future work plans?
Candidato
I have a clear vision for to be a good civil servant and then I said my tea grow for long term goal. I want to be the person that create the policy innovations about security.
Do you work or are you a student?
Puntuación: 56.0Sugerencia: ปรับความถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำให้ออกมาเป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น รูปแบบคำกริยา (work → working), คำนามเอกพจน์/พหูพจน์ (information ไม่มี -s), และคำเชื่อมให้น้อยลงและชัดเจนขึ้น พยายามตอบโดยมีประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้นๆ ไม่เกิน 3 ประโยค รองประธานควรชัดเจน เช่น ระบุหน่วยงานและหน้าที่หลัก พร้อมตัวอย่างงานหรือผลลัพธ์สั้นๆ
Ejemplo: I work as a planning and policy analyst at the National Security Council in Thailand. I mainly collect information and analyze public policies related to national security. For example, I recently prepared a policy brief on regional security cooperation.
Where do you work?
Puntuación: 48.0Sugerencia: แก้โครงสร้างประโยคและข้อมูลที่สับสน ควรตอบตรงคำถามโดยเริ่มด้วยสถานที่แล้วอธิบายหน้าที่ที่เกี่ยวข้อง ใช้คำและวลีที่ถูกต้อง (e.g., “Government House” เป็นสถานที่, “foreign guests” ไม่ใช่ “foreigner”) และหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคซ้ำหรือสับสนเกี่ยวกับตำแหน่งของคุณกับนายกรัฐมนตรี
Ejemplo: I work at the Government House in Bangkok, which is the official residence and reception venue for visiting foreign dignitaries. My office is located there, and I often help prepare briefings for meetings with international guests.
Is it a good place to work?
Puntuación: 42.0Sugerencia: ปรับคำศัพท์และวลีที่ไม่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "desert" ผิดบริบท, ลดการซ้ำคำ เช่น "symbol symbol") และจัดระเบียบประโยคให้มีหัวข้อแล้วอธิบายเหตุผลสั้นๆ ใช้คำอธิบายที่เฉพาะเจาะจงเช่น "historical architecture" หรือ "important national symbol"
Ejemplo: Yes, it's a great place to work because the Government House has important historical architecture and is a national symbol. The building's history and surroundings make it an inspiring workplace.
Would you like the place where you work?
Puntuación: 40.0Sugerencia: ตอบให้ชัดเจนว่า "ชอบ" หรือ "ไม่ชอบ" แล้วให้เหตุผลสั้นๆ ใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง (เช่น “proud”, “impressed”, “inspiring atmosphere”) และลดเสียงว่าง/การสะดุดคำ พยายามมีโครงสร้าง: ประโยคหัวข้อ + 1–2 ประโยคเสริม
Ejemplo: Yes, I like working there because I feel proud to work in such an important Government House. The historic building and impressive architecture, along with a professional work atmosphere, are very inspiring.
What are your future work plans?
Puntuación: 50.0Sugerencia: ปรับรูปแบบประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเรียบง่าย เริ่มด้วยเป้าหมายอาชีพระยะยาวแล้วอธิบายขั้นตอนหรือทักษะที่ต้องพัฒนา หลีกเลี่ยงคำแปลตรงตัวที่ผิด (e.g., "said my tea grow") และใช้คำที่เหมาะสมเช่น "long-term goal", "policy innovation", "security policy"
Ejemplo: My long-term goal is to become a leading civil servant who develops innovative security policies. To achieve this, I plan to gain more policy-making experience and attend training in strategic analysis and international relations.
× Now I am working as a plan and policy analyst in the office of National Security Council in Thailand.
✓ I am now working as a planning and policy analyst in the Office of the National Security Council in Thailand.
Use present continuous correctly and correct noun forms: 'plan' should be the gerund 'planning' to describe the job area; capitalize proper nouns and include articles: 'the Office of the National Security Council'. Place 'now' after 'am' for natural word order.
× My responsibility is the collecting some informations and analyse some public policy in Thailand and foreigner.
✓ My responsibilities are collecting some information and analysing public policies in Thailand and abroad.
Use plural 'responsibilities' to match multiple tasks (quantifier/number). 'Information' is uncountable, so not 'informations'. Use 'analysing' (verb+ -ing) to match 'collecting'. Use 'public policies' plural and 'abroad' instead of 'foreigner'.
× I work in Bangkok at Government House, where the crucial place for welcoming some foreigner or special guests from abroad, and then I work at the same place as a Prime Minister of Thailand.
✓ I work in Bangkok at the Government House, which is an important place for welcoming foreign visitors and special guests from abroad, and I work in the same building as the Prime Minister of Thailand.
Use 'at the Government House' with article and 'which is' to link clause. 'Crucial place for welcoming' is awkward; use 'important place for welcoming'. 'Foreigner' should be 'foreign visitors' or 'foreign guests'. 'In the same building as the Prime Minister' is clearer than 'at the same place as a Prime Minister'.
× Of course, my place desert so have a historical history and it is a symbol symbol of a Government House and then I think that it just a outstanding.
✓ Of course, my workplace has a long history and is a symbol of the Government House, and I think it is outstanding.
'Place desert so have a historical history' is incorrect. Use 'workplace has a long history' (possessive verb 'has'). Avoid redundant 'historical history'. Remove duplicate 'symbol'. Use 'the Government House' and 'it is outstanding' (adjective) rather than 'just a outstanding'.
× Was because of this place, this place or so as an, uh, important Government House and I feel very pasty guess because of history and impressive architecture, including the work atmosphere inspired me.
✓ It is because this is an important Government House, and I feel proud because of its history and impressive architecture; the work atmosphere also inspires me.
Sentence lacked subject and clear structure. Begin with 'It is because' and use 'proud' instead of 'pasty guess' (nonsense). Use possessive 'its history'. Use parallel structure: 'the work atmosphere also inspires me'.
× I have a clear vision for to be a good civil servant and then I said my tea grow for long term goal.
✓ I have a clear vision to be a good civil servant, and I set my career goals for the long term.
Use infinitive 'to be' after 'vision'. 'Said my tea grow' is incorrect; likely intended 'set my career goals'. Use present simple 'have' and correct noun 'career' and phrase 'for the long term'.
× I want to be the person that create the policy innovations about security.
✓ I want to be the person who creates policy innovations in security.
Use relative pronoun 'who' for people (not 'that' ideally). Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'person who creates' (creates with third person singular). Use 'in security' or 'about security' but 'in security' is more natural.