Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors such as 'cure patient' (should be 'cure patients'). Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: I've been working as a nurse for 15 years and really enjoy my job. I find it rewarding when patients recover and are discharged because it shows that my skills and knowledge have made a difference. This creates a joyful atmosphere and motivates me to continue improving my career.

Sugerencia: Your answer provides relevant information but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. For example, 'I had to I have to' is confusing. Use linking words to organise your points logically and be more specific about your responsibilities.

Ejemplo: I work in the intensive care unit of a hospital, where we care for critically ill patients. Sometimes, I act as a supervisor, overseeing the janitorial staff and ensuring the hygiene standards of the unit are maintained. Additionally, I am responsible for checking the staff attendance to ensure smooth operations.

Sugerencia: Your answer is positive and informative but could be improved by correcting grammar and using more natural expressions. For example, 'friendly and warmly' should be 'friendly and warm'. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, it's definitely a good place to work. Since my hospital is the largest in the city, I have the opportunity to learn about various diseases and treat many patients. Moreover, my colleagues are friendly and warm, and we often socialise and discuss medical cases together.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors such as 'cure patient' and 'admission different diseases'. Try to be more concise and use correct vocabulary. Also, organise your ideas with linking words to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy working at my hospital because it is the largest in the city, allowing me to treat a wide range of patients and diseases. This environment helps me to develop both my practical skills and theoretical knowledge continuously.

Sugerencia: Your answer communicates your plans but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For example, 'nurses are located in Iran' is unclear. Use linking words and clearer expressions to make your intentions more understandable.

Ejemplo: About a year ago, I decided to immigrate to a foreign country to pursue better job opportunities as a nurse. I want to follow my dreams and gain international experience, which is limited in Iran.

× I like my occupation because I cure patient and treat them.

✓ I like my occupation because I cure patients and treat them.

The noun 'patient' should be plural 'patients' because it refers to multiple individuals being treated, not just one.

× When one of patient is discharged from hospital, I feel over the moon.

✓ When one of the patients is discharged from the hospital, I feel over the moon.

The phrase 'one of patient' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the patients' to indicate one individual from a group. Also, 'hospital' needs the definite article 'the'.

× It's produced joyful atmosphere because I believe that my knowledge, my practical work are valued for them and I can treat them.

✓ It produces a joyful atmosphere because I believe that my knowledge and my practical work are valued by them and I can treat them.

The verb tense should be present simple 'produces' to match the context. 'Joyful atmosphere' needs the article 'a'. The preposition 'for' is incorrect; 'valued by them' is correct to indicate who values the work.

× We have a lot of patient and I sometimes work as a supervisor.

✓ We have a lot of patients and I sometimes work as a supervisor.

'Patient' should be plural 'patients' because it refers to multiple individuals.

× I monitor the janitor and also I had to I have to control the hygiene of the units and I have to check personnel's name.

✓ I monitor the janitor and also I have to control the hygiene of the units and I have to check the personnel's names.

The phrase 'I had to I have to' is incorrect; it should be 'I have to'. 'Personnel' is plural, so 'names' should be plural. Also, 'the personnel's names' requires the definite article 'the'.

× My hospital is the largest hospital in our city and we have lots of patients.

✓ My hospital is the largest hospital in our city and we have lots of patients.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× My colleagues are really friendly and warmly.

✓ My colleagues are really friendly and warm.

'Warmly' is an adverb and does not correctly describe 'colleagues'. The adjective 'warm' should be used to describe people.

× We enjoy each other's company and also we hang out with each other and discuss about different diseases.

✓ We enjoy each other's company and also we hang out with each other and discuss different diseases.

The verb 'discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'; it should be 'discuss different diseases'.

× Yes, I'm interested in working in a hospital because my hospital is the largest hospital in our city and we can cure patient and treat them, we can admission different diseases and we can learn a lot about health and we can progress our practical and our also theoretical now.

✓ Yes, I'm interested in working in a hospital because my hospital is the largest hospital in our city and we can cure patients and treat them, we can admit different diseases and we can learn a lot about health and we can progress our practical and also our theoretical knowledge now.

'Patient' should be plural 'patients'. The verb 'admission' is a noun; the correct verb is 'admit'. The phrase 'our also theoretical now' is awkward; it should be 'also our theoretical knowledge'.

× If I'm not mistaken, it was one years ago I decided to immigrate in foreign country and I want to.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, it was one year ago I decided to immigrate to a foreign country and I want to.

'Years' should be singular 'year' after 'one'. The preposition 'in' is incorrect; it should be 'to a foreign country'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as per grammar.

× I want to follow my dreams and nurses are located in Iran, so I wanted to find a better job opportunity as a nurse in a foreign country.

✓ I want to follow my dreams and nurses are located in Iran, so I want to find a better job opportunity as a nurse in a foreign country.

The verb tense should be consistent; 'wanted' should be 'want' to match the present intention. The sentence is otherwise correct.