Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is a bit unclear and slightly redundant. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details logically. Avoid mixing ideas in one sentence and keep it concise.

Ejemplo: I am currently working as a software engineer at Bliss, a company located in central Kathmandu. I enjoy my job because it allows me to develop innovative software products and collaborate with my team on both software and hardware projects.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some grammar issues and run-on sentences. Try to separate ideas clearly and use linking words to connect details. Also, be specific about the location and your feelings about the workplace.

Ejemplo: I work at Bliss, a company located in the center of Kathmandu. It takes me about 30 minutes to get there by bus. I really enjoy working there because my boss and colleagues are very supportive, and the work as a software engineer is fascinating.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to organize your ideas logically, use correct grammar, and provide specific reasons why the place is good to work. Use linking words to connect your points.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work mainly because it is located in the city center with beautiful gardens nearby. The fresh air and pleasant environment motivate me during work. Moreover, my colleagues are friendly and supportive, which makes the workplace enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to explain your points more clearly and avoid informal expressions like 'kind of a Topper'.

Ejemplo: I really like my workplace because my boss and colleagues are very friendly and supportive. Whenever I face difficulties with software or lack experience, they are always willing to help me. This positive environment makes me feel valued and motivated.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to organize your ideas logically, use linking words, and avoid redundancy. Be specific about your future plans and explain why they are important.

Ejemplo: In the future, I plan to work for a multinational product company where I can gain international experience. This will help me improve my skills and communicate with people from different cultures, which is important for my career growth as a product engineer.

× I really love my job because it helps me connect with people again.

✓ I really love my job because it helps me connect with people again.

No correction needed here as the verb forms are correct.

× The new idea regarding the software product because I'm a software engineer, I make a software as well as contribute to the software and hardware part of the company.

✓ Regarding the new idea about the software product, since I'm a software engineer, I develop software and also contribute to both the software and hardware parts of the company.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. It needs to be rephrased to clearly connect ideas and maintain grammatical coherence.

× I work at a company called Bliss, which is situated at the central part of the workplace is really great because of my boss and colleagues.

✓ I work at a company called Bliss, which is situated in the central part of the city. The workplace is really great because of my boss and colleagues.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two ideas without proper punctuation or conjunction, causing confusion. Splitting into two sentences clarifies meaning.

× I work at a company called Bliss, which is situated at the central part of the workplace is really great because of my boss and colleagues.

✓ I work at a company called Bliss, which is situated in the central part of the city. The workplace is really great because of my boss and colleagues.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with 'central part'; 'in' is the correct preposition to indicate location within an area.

× I go there by the bus and it is kind of 30 minutes from my home and the work is very fascinating and I'm thrilled to be working as a software engineer at the company.

✓ I go there by bus, and it takes about 30 minutes from my home. The work is very fascinating, and I'm thrilled to be working as a software engineer at the company.

The phrase 'by the bus' should be 'by bus' as 'bus' is used without an article when referring to transportation. Also, 'kind of 30 minutes' is informal and unclear; 'about 30 minutes' is more appropriate.

× As it is a very good workplace because mostly because it is situated at the center of the where we have a lot of garden area.

✓ It is a very good workplace mostly because it is situated at the center where we have a lot of garden areas.

The phrase 'situated at the center of the where' is incorrect; 'at the center where' is correct. Also, 'garden area' should be plural 'garden areas' to match the context.

× So I can smell the flower as well as the order is very much nice which makes me motivated as well as go around at the work and the mostly the colleagues are also really great to work with.

✓ So I can smell the flowers, and the odor is very pleasant, which motivates me as I go around at work. Also, most of the colleagues are really great to work with.

'Smell the flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'Order' is a misspelling of 'odor'. 'Very much nice' is incorrect; 'very pleasant' is better. 'Go around at the work' should be 'go around at work'. 'Mostly the colleagues' should be 'most of the colleagues'.

× As I love the place where I'm currently working because mostly of boss and my friends.

✓ I love the place where I'm currently working mostly because of my boss and my friends.

The phrase 'because mostly of boss' is incorrect; it should be 'mostly because of my boss'. Also, 'As' at the beginning is unnecessary and confusing.

× The friends and colleagues are very much amiable.

✓ My friends and colleagues are very amiable.

'The friends' is vague; 'my friends' is more appropriate to specify the people referred to.

× Whenever I get any problem regarding the software or maybe some information that I'm inexperienced, then they help me a lot.

✓ Whenever I have any problem regarding software or need information that I'm inexperienced with, they help me a lot.

'Get any problem' is better expressed as 'have any problem'. 'Information that I'm inexperienced' is incorrect; it should be 'information that I'm inexperienced with'.

× Similar goes to the boss, he's very approachable.

✓ The same goes for the boss; he's very approachable.

'Similar goes to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'The same goes for'.

× I think I'll be mostly working in the similar kind of a product company, but I think I'll be working with the multinational companies where I will be basically getting experience, not only national, but also I'll communicate with the international people and the international product, which will be important for my career, career growth because I want to work as a product engineer.

✓ I think I'll mostly be working in a similar kind of product company, but I hope to work with multinational companies where I will gain experience not only nationally but also by communicating with international people and working on international products, which will be important for my career growth because I want to work as a product engineer.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and tense issues. 'Mostly working in the similar kind of a product company' should be 'mostly be working in a similar kind of product company'. 'Basically getting experience' is better as 'gain experience'. 'Not only national' should be 'not only nationally'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct future tense usage.