Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and incomplete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific details logically using linking words.

Ejemplo: I am currently an undergraduate student and also work full-time as a volunteer. Because my country is led by young activists, I decided to volunteer in community work in a remote area to contribute to social development.

Sugerencia: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Avoid filler words like 'like' and be specific about your role and organization.

Ejemplo: I work in a remote area as a volunteer medical officer. Additionally, I helped found a humanitarian organization with like-minded individuals, which operates entirely on volunteer efforts.

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and naturalness by correcting word choice and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons.

Ejemplo: Actually, it is not a good place to work because it is a remote and conflict-affected area. There is frequent fighting between the military and federal army, and drones and fighter jets often fly overhead, making it very dangerous.

Sugerencia: Focus on clear and concise sentences with correct vocabulary. Use linking words to organize your points logically and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I do not like the place where I work because there is no internet or phone connection, and the electricity has been cut off by the military. Additionally, resources are very limited, and our lives are threatened daily.

Sugerencia: Make your answer more natural by using correct verb forms and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your plans logically.

Ejemplo: I plan to pursue a master's degree at Chiang Mai University. After that, I intend to continue my career as a clinical researcher.

× I am an undergraduate student with full time volunteer work.

✓ I am an undergraduate student doing full-time volunteer work.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper verb usage. 'With full time volunteer work' is not a correct phrase to describe ongoing activity. Using 'doing full-time volunteer work' clearly indicates the student's involvement. Also, 'full-time' should be hyphenated as it is a compound adjective.

× As my country is currently under the leadership as a youth who is dedicated and activist, I decided to volunteer at the remote area in community work but.

✓ As my country is currently under youth leadership, and I am a dedicated activist, I decided to volunteer in remote areas doing community work.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Under the leadership as a youth who is dedicated and activist' is unclear. The correction clarifies that the country is under youth leadership and the speaker is a dedicated activist. Also, 'at the remote area in community work but' is incomplete and awkward; it is corrected to 'in remote areas doing community work.'

× I am currently working at the remote area and I am also like a founder of humanitarian organization founded by like minded individual which is a totally volunteer based.

✓ I am currently working in a remote area and I am also a founder of a humanitarian organization founded by like-minded individuals, which is totally volunteer-based.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to 'remote area'; 'in' is appropriate. 'Like a founder' is incorrect; it should be 'a founder.' Articles 'a' are missing before 'humanitarian organization' and 'like-minded individuals.' Hyphens are needed in 'like-minded' and 'volunteer-based.'

× I am also like a founder of humanitarian organization founded by like minded individual which is a totally volunteer based.

✓ I am also a founder of a humanitarian organization founded by like-minded individuals, which is totally volunteer-based.

The noun 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' because it refers to multiple people. Also, articles 'a' are missing before 'humanitarian organization.' Hyphens are needed in 'like-minded' and 'volunteer-based.'

× Actually, it is not a good place to walk because it is a remote area and otherwise conflict area.

✓ Actually, it is not a good place to work because it is a remote and conflict area.

The word 'walk' is a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'work' to answer the question about the workplace. Also, 'otherwise conflict area' is incorrect; 'conflict area' suffices, and 'and' connects the two adjectives properly.

× The fighting between military and the federal army always take place and also drones and jail fighters are flying overhead.

✓ The fighting between the military and the federal army always takes place, and drones and jail fighters are flying overhead.

'Military' needs the definite article 'the.' The verb 'take' should be 'takes' to agree with the singular subject 'fighting.' Commas improve sentence clarity.

× Actually I don't like the place where I walk because there is no Internet access and also or phone connection and electricity has been cut off by the military and also very limited resources and very limited area and also our life are always threatened daily.

✓ Actually, I don't like the place where I work because there is no Internet access, no phone connection, electricity has been cut off by the military, resources are very limited, the area is very limited, and our lives are always threatened daily.

'Walk' should be 'work' to fit context. 'Or phone connection' is incorrect; it should be 'no phone connection.' The sentence is a run-on and needs commas and conjunctions for clarity. 'Life' should be plural 'lives' to match 'our.' Verbs need to agree with their subjects ('resources are,' 'area is').

× I am planning to try master degree at the Chiang Mai University and after that I decided to like to continue my life as a clinical researcher.

✓ I am planning to pursue a master's degree at Chiang Mai University, and after that, I have decided to continue my life as a clinical researcher.

'Try master degree' is incorrect; 'pursue a master's degree' is the correct phrase. 'The Chiang Mai University' should be 'Chiang Mai University' without 'the.' 'I decided to like to continue' is awkward; 'I have decided to continue' is correct. Commas improve sentence flow.