Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but contains some language errors and awkward phrasing, such as "deposits my communications skills." Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: I work part-time as a barista at a cafe near my hometown while studying for my bachelor's degree in Business Administration. I enjoy this job because it helps me improve my communication skills and supports me financially during my studies.

Sugerencia: There are some spelling mistakes like "barrister" instead of "barista" and "latte ark" instead of "latte art." Also, avoid repeating phrases like "I really I really." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your tasks.

Ejemplo: I work as a barista at a cafe near my hometown. My job involves making various types of coffee and creating latte art, which allows me to be creative and interact with customers. Moreover, I enjoy the friendly atmosphere and the chance to learn new brewing techniques every day.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some grammar and coherence issues, such as "or which gets a positive and a cooperative atmosphere." Try to use linking words like "because" and "so" properly and avoid awkward phrases like "pleasant plus to work." Make your sentences clear and logical.

Ejemplo: Definitely yes, because the owner and staff are very friendly and always willing to help. We support each other when problems arise, which creates a positive and cooperative atmosphere. Therefore, it is a very pleasant place to work.

Sugerencia: Your answer is good but contains some errors like "supporting colleges" instead of "supportive colleagues" and missing articles like "a very pleasant environment." Use precise vocabulary and check grammar to improve clarity.

Ejemplo: Of course, I really like my workplace because it offers a good salary and supports my studies financially. The friendly atmosphere with supportive colleagues and the owner makes it a very pleasant environment. Overall, I feel comfortable and motivated working there.

Sugerencia: Your answer has several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "wants to handle the more responsibilities while ordering a higher income to as if this goal I I plan." Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct verb forms, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your plans logically.

Ejemplo: Currently, I am working as a junior barista, but in the future, I hope to become the head barista. I want to achieve this because I am passionate about the cafe and want to take on more responsibilities while earning a higher income. To reach this goal, I plan to gain more experience and improve my skills through continuous learning.

× I enjoy working there because it deposits my communications skills and supports my studies financially.

✓ I enjoy working there because it improves my communication skills and supports my studies financially.

The word 'deposits' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'improves' to indicate enhancement. Also, 'communications skills' should be 'communication skills' as 'communication' is an uncountable noun used as an adjective here.

× I work as a barrister at cafe near my hometown.

✓ I work as a barista at a cafe near my hometown.

The word 'barrister' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'barista'. Also, 'cafe' needs the article 'a' before it.

× My job involves making different kinds of coffee and designing latte ark, which allows me to be more creative and interact with the customer.

✓ My job involves making different kinds of coffee and designing latte art, which allows me to be more creative and interact with customers.

The word 'ark' is a typo and should be 'art'. Also, 'the customer' should be plural 'customers' to indicate interaction with multiple people.

× I really I really enjoy the friendly atmosphere and the opportunity to learn the new brewing techniques every day.

✓ I really enjoy the friendly atmosphere and the opportunity to learn new brewing techniques every day.

The phrase 'I really I really' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'I really'. Also, 'the new brewing techniques' should be 'new brewing techniques' without 'the' as it refers to techniques in general.

× We support each other whenever there are problems or which gets a positive and a cooperative atmosphere.

✓ We support each other whenever there are problems, which creates a positive and cooperative atmosphere.

The original sentence has a confusing structure with 'or which gets'. It should be rephrased to clarify that mutual support leads to a positive atmosphere.

× This makes it very pleasant plus to work.

✓ This makes it very pleasant to work here.

The word 'plus' is incorrectly placed and unnecessary. The sentence should be simplified for clarity.

× The friendly atmosphere with supporting colleges and the owner makes it very pleasant environment.

✓ The friendly atmosphere with supportive colleagues and the owner makes it a very pleasant environment.

'Supporting colleges' is incorrect; it should be 'supportive colleagues'. Also, 'pleasant environment' needs the article 'a' before it.

× Currently I am working as a junior barista but in future I hope to become a head of barista.

✓ Currently I am working as a junior barista, but in the future I hope to become the head barista.

'In future' should be 'in the future'. Also, 'a head of barista' is incorrect; it should be 'the head barista'.

× I want to achieve this because I am passionate about the Cafe and wants to handle the more responsibilities while ordering a higher income to as if this goal I I plan to gain more experience and improve my skills through continuous learning.

✓ I want to achieve this because I am passionate about the cafe and want to handle more responsibilities while earning a higher income. To achieve this goal, I plan to gain more experience and improve my skills through continuous learning.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'wants' should be 'want' to agree with 'I'; 'ordering' should be 'earning'; 'to as if this goal' is unclear and corrected to 'To achieve this goal'; repeated 'I I' is removed; overall sentence is restructured for clarity.