Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant information. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using correct grammar and vocabulary.

Ejemplo: I am currently a student. I recently completed my senior examinations and plan to study abroad to support my father's academic pursuits. Being a student allows me to participate in various academic and extracurricular activities.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: I don't work at the moment because I am focusing on my studies. However, after I go abroad, I plan to do a part-time job to support my daily expenses.

Sugerencia: Avoid responding defensively. Instead, answer politely and directly. If you don't work, you can say so and add your opinion about the place you plan to work in the future.

Ejemplo: I don't currently work, so I haven't experienced any workplace yet. But I hope to find a good place to work when I start my part-time job abroad.

Sugerencia: Your answer is vague and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain your feelings with specific reasons using proper linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like the place where I will work in the future because it will be the starting point of my career and personal growth.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Be specific about your plans and reasons.

Ejemplo: In the future, after studying abroad, I plan to start my own business. This will help me achieve financial stability and support my family financially.

× Yes, I am currently student.

✓ Yes, I am currently a student.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'student'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' corrects the sentence.

× I recently completed my senior examination and now I plan to abort for my father's study.

✓ I recently completed my senior examination and now I plan to go abroad for my father's study.

The word 'abort' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'go abroad'. Also, 'for' is correctly used to indicate purpose. The correction replaces 'abort' with 'go abroad' to convey the intended meaning.

× That's why our student and being a student give me opportunity to participate in various academics and extra circular activities.

✓ That's why being a student gives me the opportunity to participate in various academic and extracurricular activities.

The phrase 'our student' is incorrect and unnecessary. 'Being a student' is singular and requires the verb 'gives' (third person singular). 'Opportunity' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Academics' should be 'academic' as an adjective, and 'extra circular' is a misspelling of 'extracurricular'.

× I don't work because now I am a student my main focus on my study but after reaching at abroad I try to to do part time job because it help me to build my daily.

✓ I don't work because I am currently a student and my main focus is on my studies, but after reaching abroad, I will try to do a part-time job because it will help me with my daily expenses.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper conjunctions and articles. 'My main focus on my study' should be 'my main focus is on my studies'. 'After reaching at abroad' should be 'after reaching abroad'. 'Try to to do' has a repeated 'to'. 'Part time job' needs a hyphen and an article. 'It help me to build my daily' is unclear; corrected to 'it will help me with my daily expenses' for clarity.

× I mentioned in above question I don't do any type of work then why you ask me is it a good place to work?

✓ I mentioned in the above question that I don't do any type of work, so why do you ask me if it is a good place to work?

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'above question'. It also needs conjunctions 'that' and 'so' to connect clauses properly. The question form 'why you ask me is it' is incorrect; it should be 'why do you ask me if it is'.

× Yes, I would like to the place where I work in future because that place is just starting all my life from beginning.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I will work in the future because that place is just the beginning of my life.

The phrase 'like to the place' is incorrect; it should be 'like the place'. 'In future' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Starting all my life from beginning' is awkward; corrected to 'just the beginning of my life' for clarity and correctness.

× Only in future, after reading abroad, I would like to start my own business that help me to, uh, financial stables and uh, to support my family with the way of finance.

✓ Only in the future, after studying abroad, I would like to start my own business that helps me to be financially stable and to support my family financially.

'In future' needs 'the'. 'Reading abroad' is incorrect; it should be 'studying abroad'. 'Help me to, uh, financial stables' is incorrect; corrected to 'helps me to be financially stable'. 'Support my family with the way of finance' is awkward; corrected to 'support my family financially'.