Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。より簡潔で明確に、自分の職業と仕事内容を述べることを意識しましょう。例えば、主語と動詞の一致、適切な語彙の使用に注意してください。

Ejemplo: I work at a newspaper company in Japan, where I cover stories about science and technology. I find this job exciting because I learn about the latest developments worldwide.

Sugerencia: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、'uh'などのフィラーが多く、話の流れがスムーズではありません。接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげ、自然な表現を心がけましょう。

Ejemplo: I work in central Tokyo, but I often travel to different areas in Tokyo and other cities to conduct interviews. I enjoy this because I like exploring various places in Japan.

Sugerencia: 回答に多くのフィラーが含まれており、文法的な誤りもあります。具体的な理由を述べる際は、正確な語彙を使い、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think it is a good place to work. My company is one of the most important news agencies in Japan, and I have the opportunity to meet various people such as doctors, lawyers, and politicians.

Sugerencia: 回答が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に対して直接的に答え、理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。不要な情報や不自然な表現は避けてください。

Ejemplo: No, I don't like working in central Tokyo because it is overcrowded and noisy. I prefer rural areas; when I was 25, I worked at a branch office there, and I found it very stimulating.

Sugerencia: 回答は比較的明確ですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。理由を述べる際は、より自然な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

Ejemplo: I want to continue working as a journalist for as long as possible because I am proud of my profession. Writing articles is important for maintaining democracy in our country, so I want to contribute through my work.

× I am more generous to working at a newspaper company in Japan especially.

✓ I am working at a newspaper company in Japan especially.

The phrase 'generous to working' is incorrect. The verb 'am' should be followed by the present participle form 'working' to indicate the current action. The word 'generous' is not appropriate here.

× I am more generous to working at a newspaper company in Japan especially.

✓ I am working at a newspaper company in Japan especially.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used after 'generous'. The correct preposition for 'working' in this context is omitted; instead, the sentence should simply state 'I am working at...'.

× I always cover the story about science and technology, which is very exciting and stimulating for me because I can get a lot of information about the cutting edge all over the world.

✓ I always cover stories about science and technology, which are very exciting and stimulating for me because I can get a lot of information about the cutting edge all over the world.

The word 'story' should be plural 'stories' because the student covers multiple stories. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural subject 'stories'.

× I work in central Tokyo, but, uh, for conducting interviews, uh, I always go to many areas in Tokyo or, uh, other cities.

✓ I work in central Tokyo, but for conducting interviews, I always go to many areas in Tokyo or other cities.

The phrase 'for conducting interviews' is awkward here. It would be better to say 'to conduct interviews' to express purpose.

× And this work style is a very interesting and suitable for me because I like to go to many places in Japan.

✓ And this work style is very interesting and suitable for me because I like to go to many places in Japan.

The article 'a' before 'very interesting' is unnecessary because 'interesting' is an adjective describing 'work style' which is uncountable here.

× Umm and then I can go to anywhere and meet many types of people such as doctor and lower or politicians.

✓ Umm, and then I can go anywhere and meet many types of people such as doctors, lawyers, or politicians.

The word 'anywhere' does not need 'to' before it. Also, 'doctor' and 'lower' are incorrect; it should be plural 'doctors' and 'lawyers'.

× And no, I don't like the center of Tokyo because it is overcrowded and many people are annoying me.

✓ No, I don't like the center of Tokyo because it is overcrowded and many people annoy me.

The phrase 'many people are annoying me' is awkward; 'many people annoy me' is more natural. Also, 'And no' is better as just 'No'.

× Everything by large chatting boys.

✓ Everything is mostly noisy boys chatting.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It seems to mean that mostly noisy boys are chatting everywhere. The correction clarifies this meaning.

× When I was 25 years old I worked at the branch.

✓ When I was 25 years old, I worked at a branch office.

The phrase 'the branch' is vague; 'a branch office' is more appropriate. Also, a comma is needed after the introductory clause.

× I want to keep my profession as long as possible because I like to work as a journalist and be proud of myself.

✓ I want to keep my profession as long as possible because I like working as a journalist and being proud of myself.

The verbs 'work' and 'be' should be in gerund form 'working' and 'being' after 'like' to express enjoyment of the activity.

× The most important job in our country to keep the democracy is writing articles, so I want to do that for a long time.

✓ The most important job in our country to keep democracy is writing articles, so I want to do that for a long time.

The phrase 'the democracy' is incorrect; 'democracy' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing 'the' before 'democracy'.