Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is informative but a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences shorter and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

Ejemplo: I am both a student and a part-time worker. I study at John Book National University in southern South Korea, and after classes, I work at a 24-hour convenience store called 711.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid repetition and improve vocabulary usage.

Ejemplo: I work at a convenience store called 711, which is a popular chain across South Korea. Because of its convenience, many people visit it frequently.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific reasons why it is a good place to work.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe it is a good place to work because the environment is friendly and the facilities are adequate. Also, I can manage my time well to study while working.

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but has some repetition and grammar mistakes. Use linking words properly and avoid repeating words. Also, try to be more concise and clear.

Ejemplo: I really like my workplace; however, it gets more crowded on weekends because people from all over South Korea come here for the variety of food available.

Sugerencia: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. Be more specific about your plans and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: In the future, I plan to work in a programming-related job since I am studying computer science engineering and have learned several programming languages. I hope to join a company that focuses on software development.

× I work as an part timer in a convenient shop named 711 which is 24 hour shop.

✓ I work as a part-timer in a convenience shop named 711 which is a 24-hour shop.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before 'part timer' which starts with a consonant sound, so it should be 'a part-timer'. Also, 'convenient shop' should be 'convenience shop' as it is the correct noun form. Additionally, '24 hour shop' needs an article 'a' and a hyphen to form 'a 24-hour shop'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I work in a convenience shop which is an called 711, which is actually a chain shop and you can see this particular shopping all over the Korea and the I think it's a very convenient.

✓ I work in a convenience shop called 711, which is actually a chain shop and you can see this particular shop all over Korea, and I think it's very convenient.

The phrase 'an called' is incorrect; 'called' does not need an article before it. 'Shopping' should be 'shop' to refer to the store. 'The Korea' is incorrect; 'Korea' does not need 'the'. Also, 'the I think' should be 'and I think'. These corrections fix article misuse and improve sentence structure.

× So people come here more often.

✓ So people come here more often.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not contain any errors related to prepositions or other grammar issues listed.

× Yes, I do believe that it's a very good place for work.

✓ Yes, I do believe that it's a very good place to work.

The phrase 'place for work' is less natural than 'place to work'. The preposition 'to' is used to indicate purpose or intention, so 'place to work' is the correct form.

× Work environment and other facilities are good when customer a little bit.

✓ The work environment and other facilities are good, although there are a few customers sometimes.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. It seems to attempt to say that the work environment and facilities are good, but customer presence is low or variable. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× So we try to do our homework and study.

✓ So we try to do our work and study.

'Homework' refers to school assignments, which is unlikely in a work context. 'Work' is the correct noun here. This correction aligns the pronoun and noun usage with the context.

× It's very beneficial to work here.

✓ It's very beneficial to work here.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not contain any errors related to prepositions or other grammar issues listed.

× Actually, I like a lot my workplace, but however in the weekend it's more crowded than the weekdays.

✓ Actually, I like my workplace a lot, but on the weekend it's more crowded than on weekdays.

The phrase 'like a lot my workplace' has incorrect word order; 'like my workplace a lot' is correct. 'However' is redundant with 'but'. 'In the weekend' should be 'on the weekend', and 'the weekdays' should be 'weekdays'. These corrections fix pronoun placement, conjunction use, and prepositions.

× People came here from all around all all over South Korea because this particular place is very popular for its variety kind of food.

✓ People come here from all over South Korea because this particular place is very popular for its variety of food.

'Came' should be 'come' to match present tense. 'All around all all over' is redundant; 'all over' suffices. 'Variety kind of food' should be 'variety of food'. These corrections fix tense, redundancy, and preposition use.

× My future work plan is to do my subject related job which is currently I am studying at computer science engineering and so I know some kind of programming language.

✓ My future work plan is to do a job related to my subject; currently, I am studying computer science engineering and I know some programming languages.

The phrase 'subject related job' needs an article and hyphen: 'subject-related job'. 'At computer science engineering' should be 'in computer science engineering'. 'Some kind of programming language' is better as 'some programming languages' for clarity and correctness.

× So I will work in the future in a company which is based on programming.

✓ So I will work in the future at a company that is based on programming.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to working at a company. 'Which is based on programming' is better as 'that is based on programming' for defining clauses. These corrections improve preposition use and clause clarity.