Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is informative but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar information and use the present perfect tense correctly. For example, say "I have been working as a nurse in a private hospital in Saudi Arabia for nine years; this is my first job outside the Philippines."

Ejemplo: I have been working as a nurse in a private hospital in Saudi Arabia for nine years, and this is my first job outside the Philippines.

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. For example, say "I work in a private hospital with a capacity of 100 beds, where we treat a variety of cases ranging from acute to chronic diseases."

Ejemplo: I work in a private hospital with a capacity of 100 beds, where we treat a variety of cases ranging from acute to chronic diseases.

Sugerencia: Your answer is positive but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use correct possessive forms and avoid repeating similar ideas. For example, say "Yes, it's a lovely place to work because the management is very supportive, and my managers treat us like family."

Ejemplo: Yes, it's a lovely place to work because the management is very supportive, and my managers treat us like family.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct sentence structures and linking words. For example, say "I like my workplace because my colleagues are very friendly, and we treat each other like family. Additionally, we always help one another."

Ejemplo: I like my workplace because my colleagues are very friendly, and we treat each other like family. Additionally, we always help one another.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Use clear and correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, say "My future plan is to be a role model and inspire my fellow nurses to be more passionate about their work and patient care."

Ejemplo: My future plan is to be a role model and inspire my fellow nurses to be more passionate about their work and patient care.

× I had been working here in Saudi for nine years and this is my first job outside the Philippines.

✓ I have been working here in Saudi for nine years and this is my first job outside the Philippines.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the past perfect continuous tense 'had been working' which implies an action completed before another past action. Since the speaker is referring to a period continuing up to the present, the present perfect continuous 'have been working' is appropriate.

× I am working in a private hospital which has 100 bed capacity and we cater different cases from acute to chronic diseases.

✓ I am working in a private hospital which has 100 beds capacity and we cater to different cases from acute to chronic diseases.

The noun 'bed' should be plural 'beds' to agree with the number 100. Also, the verb 'cater' requires the preposition 'to' when referring to the cases served.

× the management's are very supportive to the employees and also my managers are very kind to me and they treat us like a family.

✓ the management is very supportive of the employees and also my managers are very kind to me and they treat us like a family.

'Management' is a collective noun and treated as singular, so 'is' is correct instead of 'are'. Also, the correct preposition with 'supportive' is 'of' not 'to'.

× I could see that my work please are very lovely because of my colleagues are very friendly and we treat each other as a family.

✓ I could see that my workplace is very lovely because my colleagues are very friendly and we treat each other as a family.

'Work please' is incorrect; the correct word is 'workplace'. Also, 'workplace' is singular, so 'is' should be used instead of 'are'. The phrase 'because of my colleagues are' is incorrect; it should be 'because my colleagues are'.

× Additionally, we always said help each other.

✓ Additionally, we always help each other.

The word 'said' is incorrect here and unnecessary. The correct sentence is 'we always help each other' to express habitual action.

× The plans I want for my future is to be a role model because I want to inspire my cool nurses to be more Passion 8 at work and in treating patients.

✓ The plans I want for my future are to be a role model because I want to inspire my fellow nurses to be more passionate at work and in treating patients.

'Plans' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Cool nurses' is informal and unclear; 'fellow nurses' is more appropriate. 'Passion 8' seems to be a typo; the correct adjective is 'passionate'.